Question

就在昨天外教(Mr. Black)的口語課上, 你(Liu Ming)使用手機時被老師發(fā)現(xiàn)，手機被收走。請用英語給教師寫一封信道歉，內(nèi)容應(yīng)包括以下要點：
(字?jǐn)?shù)：120左右, 信的開頭和結(jié)尾已給出，不計入總詞數(shù))
1、表示你的歉意;
2、解釋為什么當(dāng)時使用手機(說出至少一個理由);
3、提出自己的請求并適當(dāng)表態(tài)。
Dear Mr. Black,
I am really sorry ___________________________________________________________________________
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Best wishes!
Yours sincerely,
Liu Ming

Answer 1

Dear Mr. Black,
I am really sorry about my using the mobile phone in your lecture yesterday. Please accept my heart-felt apology for being so rude a student.
I know any word might sound a make-up excuse. But I didn’t use my mobile phone for no reason. I was trying to (….學(xué)生當(dāng)時使用手機的理由….) Therefore, I got no choice but try sending them a text message in class and that was exactly what I was doing when you discovered.
Anyway, using a mobile phone in a classroom was not acceptable to any teacher. I make sure it will not happen again. But I do need my phone back to keep in touch with others.
Will you be so kind as to give it back to me. Thanks a lot!
Best wishes!
Yours sincerely
Liu Ming

試題分析：題目要求寫一封道歉信，向外教道歉。寫作要點包括：表達(dá)歉意；解釋使用手機的原因；提出請求并作出保證。使用第一人稱進行寫作，注意書信的格式和禮貌用語；書寫工整，不要出現(xiàn)標(biāo)點和拼寫錯誤，正確使用時態(tài)和語法知識。
【亮點說明】范文使用了非謂語動詞my using the mobile phone，being so rude a student，using a mobile phone；
固定句型：got no choice but try sending them a text message；表語從句what I was doing；賓語從句make sure it will not happen again等語法知識，顯示了一定的語法基礎(chǔ)；
范文還使用了一些固定短語：keep in touch with；so kind as；give it back to等，使作文內(nèi)容變得充實；
范文注意使用But，Therefore，Anyway等銜接前后句和上下文，是作文顯得緊湊，前后聯(lián)系緊密。