Question

請(qǐng)根據(jù)以下提示，并結(jié)合事例，用英語(yǔ)寫一篇短文。
Encouragement from a friend plays a very important role in motivating you to solve the problems you are facing . It helps you deal with stressful moments in life.
注意：① 無(wú)須寫標(biāo)題，不得照抄英語(yǔ)提示語(yǔ)；
② 除詩(shī)歌外，文體不限；
③ 文中不得透露個(gè)人姓名和學(xué)校名稱；
④ 詞數(shù)為120 左右。

Answer 1

Encouragements can serve as a ray of hope during difficult times. The best ones to encourage a depressed soul are our friends and our parents.
It happened three years ago, when I was just admitted to high school. For the first time, I failed in an English exam, though English had been my favourite. You can’t imagine how depressed I was at the time. My best friend Lily saw this and tried to comfort me, offering her emotional support. She listened to me carefully and told me some inspiring stories about how some famous people reacted in front of failure. Eventually, with her patient encouragement, I overcame depression and was determined to try hard again. In the next exam, I made it.
Encouragement is the best means to help someone feel better. It can give the courage to fight difficulties and motivate someone to move on.

試題分析：鼓勵(lì)可以激起人的希望，催人奮進(jìn)。本篇書面表達(dá)要求結(jié)合事例談?wù)劇肮膭?lì)”在我們生活、學(xué)習(xí)中的作用。文章不限文體，所以寫作時(shí)可以根據(jù)自己的擅長(zhǎng)或者寫成抒情性散文或者寫成加敘加議的文章，但是按照要求必須補(bǔ)充事例。在謀篇布局上，寫作時(shí)應(yīng)該首先提出“鼓勵(lì)”對(duì)我們的影響和激勵(lì)作用，然后再結(jié)合事例進(jìn)行論證。而在語(yǔ)言方面則要盡量使用多種句式結(jié)構(gòu)以增加文章的亮點(diǎn)，比如倒裝句、強(qiáng)調(diào)句等。此外，為了讓文章上下文連貫、語(yǔ)言流暢自然、還要注意適當(dāng)使用連接詞，比如表示轉(zhuǎn)折的however、表示遞進(jìn)關(guān)系的besides、what’s more等。
【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】本篇范文采用經(jīng)典的三段式，在文章開頭開門見山提出文章中心話題：Encouragements can serve as a ray of hope during difficult times，第二段采用事例來(lái)進(jìn)行論證，最后做出總結(jié)，呼應(yīng)主題，這種布局安排使得文章結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊、脈絡(luò)清晰。在文中作者使用了a ray of hope、a depressed soul、motivate、Eventually、inspiring等高級(jí)詞匯，顯示了作者豐富的詞匯知識(shí)。短語(yǔ)For the first time、with her patient encouragement和副詞eventually的使用不僅使文章的語(yǔ)言銜接自然，而且也使文章的段落層次更為分明。此外，感嘆句how depressed I was at the time、狀語(yǔ)從句though English had been my favourite以及非謂語(yǔ)offering her emotional support的使用也給文章增添了亮點(diǎn)，提升了檔次。