Question

閱讀下面的短文，然后按照要求寫一篇150詞左右的英語短文。
More than five years I was working at a little clinic after I graduated from college. Actually I didn’t like the job and felt depressed every day. One day while working at the cash register, an elderly couple came in with a little girl in a wheelchair.
As I looked closer at this girl, I realized that she was disabled. I then realized she had no arms or legs, just a head, neck and torso. She was in red. That is a warm color.
As I took the money from her grandparent, I looked down at the girl, who was giving me the cutest, largest smile I have ever seen. All of a sudden her handicap was gone and all I saw was this beautiful girl, and her smile, just like the warm sun in the winter melted me and almost instantly gave me a completely new sense of what life is all about.
It was her smile that took me from a poor, unhappy college student and brought me into her world; a world of smiles, love and warmth.
Now I’m a successful business person and whenever I get down and think about the troubles of the world, I think about that little girl and the remarkable lesson about life that she taught me.
【寫作內(nèi)容】
1．以約30個詞概括這篇短文的內(nèi)容要點。
然后以約120詞就“生活態(tài)度”這一話題發(fā)表你的看法，內(nèi)容包括：
上述故事給你的感受與啟發(fā)；
舉例說明你生活中遇到過讓你改變生活態(tài)度的人或事；
你認(rèn)為生活態(tài)度對我們的生活有何重要意義。
【寫作要求】
1．可以使用實例來支持你的論點，也可以參照閱讀材料的內(nèi)容，但不得直接引用原文中的句子；
2．作文中不能出現(xiàn)真實姓名和學(xué)校名稱。
【評分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)】
概括準(zhǔn)確，語言規(guī)范，內(nèi)容合適，語篇連貫。

Answer 1

The writer encountered a little disabled girl when he was working as a cashier in a clinic. The girl’s smile taught the writer a profound lesson, and inspired him to become successful.
After reading the story, I was deeply touched too. I’m in favor of the idea that when you smile to the world, the world will smile back to you. The story reminds me of my friend Joe, who used to complain a lot when he came across any kind of difficulty or whenever something unpleasant happened to him. Later, Joe’s classmate sitting next to him in Senior Grade One helped him to change greatly. The classmate was born in a very poor family, but instead of complaining, he always smiled to everybody around and devoted himself to his studies. Ever since he met his deskmate, more and more smiles appeared on Joe’s face and soon he even made greater progress in his studies.
In a word, attitude is everything. Only when we take a correct attitude toward life can we enjoy a better, more meaningful and more beautiful life.

試題分析：本文屬于讀寫任務(wù)寫作，動筆前，一定要認(rèn)真閱讀原文，并理解內(nèi)容。認(rèn)真看清題目要求，這篇書面表達(dá)給了一段材料：先要求以約30個詞概括上文的主要內(nèi)容，要求有很高的概括提煉的能力，要抓住文章的主題，再以約120個詞寫一篇短文，按照要點去表達(dá)，不能有遺漏，寫作時注意準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯關(guān)系。寫作時盡量使用自己會的單詞、詞組和句型，同時也要注意使用一些高級語法和句型，使自己的文章更有文采。
【亮點說明】文章簡潔的總結(jié)了所給材料，語言規(guī)范，內(nèi)容合適，語篇連貫，使用了詞組：work as擔(dān)當(dāng)， in favor of 支持，贊同，instead of 代替，devoted himself to 致力于，In a word總之，和句型：The story reminds me of my friend Joe, who used to complain a lot when he came across any kind of difficulty or whenever something unpleasant happened to him. 這句話用了定語從句和讓步狀語從句，Later, Joe’s classmate sitting next to him in Senior Grade One helped him to change greatly.這句話用了現(xiàn)在分詞做定語，Only when we take a correct attitude toward life can we enjoy a better, more meaningful and more beautiful life.這句話用了倒裝句。