Question

假如你是一名失學(xué)兒童，名叫李華，你有幸得到在中國(guó)工作的Mr. Brown的資助，可以重返校園。你給Mr. Brown寫了一封信，內(nèi)容如下：
　　★ 收到錢和書后能重返校園，非常感激；
　　★ 在老師的幫助下，學(xué)習(xí)有了很大的進(jìn)步，受到老師的表?yè)P(yáng)和鼓勵(lì)；
　　★ 決心更加努力學(xué)習(xí)，取得更大的進(jìn)步；
　　★ 盼望見到Mr. Brown，希望他寄來(lái)一張照片。
注意：1. 書信應(yīng)包括以上所有要點(diǎn)，可適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫；2. 詞數(shù)：100左右

Answer 1

Dear Mr. Brown，
　  I am writing to express my deepest gratitude for the money and books you sent me. I could not have returned to school without your help. Thank you so much.
I have been working hard since I went back to school. I have made great progress in my studies with the help of my teachers. They often praise me and encourage me. But for your help, I might have left school and couldn’t have got such a good education. I have made up my mind to study harder and make greater progress.
How are you getting on with your life and work? I would like to meet you in person, but I have no opportunity to do so. Would you please send me a photo of yourself?
Thank you again for your generous help and best wishes!
Yours Sincerely，
Li Hua　

試題分析：考查提綱類書面表達(dá)：這是一篇提綱類作文，我們需要用正確的英語(yǔ)把給出的要點(diǎn)表達(dá)出來(lái). 動(dòng)筆前，一定要認(rèn)真分析要點(diǎn)，理解要點(diǎn)要表達(dá)的含義，不能遺漏要點(diǎn)，跑題偏題。本作文中給出的要點(diǎn)比較具體,故需要準(zhǔn)確表達(dá).寫作時(shí)注意準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時(shí)態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯關(guān)系，盡量使用自己熟悉的單詞句式，同時(shí)也要注意使用高級(jí)詞匯和高級(jí)句型使文章顯得更有檔次。特別注意在選擇句式時(shí)要賦予變化。平時(shí)除了加強(qiáng)詞匯積累，寫作聯(lián)系以外，還可以適當(dāng)記憶一些類似的范文，這樣在考試中可以起到事半功倍的效果。
【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】范文中出現(xiàn)一些常見的短語(yǔ)：returned to 返回某處； made great progress取得進(jìn)步； with the help of 在某人幫助下；made up my mind to下定決心做某事； getting on with與某人相處如何； have no opportunity to do 沒(méi)有機(jī)會(huì)做某事。I have been working hard since I went back to school.這句話中考查現(xiàn)在完成時(shí)。But for your help, I might have left school and couldn’t have got such a good education.這句話中運(yùn)用對(duì)過(guò)去的虛擬語(yǔ)氣。I have made up my mind to study harder and make greater progress這個(gè)句子運(yùn)用兩個(gè)比較級(jí)，前后相互呼應(yīng)。