Question

閱讀下面的短文，然后按照要求寫一篇150詞左右的英語短文。

A peacock was very unhappy with his ugly voice; and he spent most of his days complaining about it.
"It is true that you cannot sing;" said the fox, "but look how beautiful you are!"
"0b，but what good is all this beauty;" cried the bird, "with such an unpleasant voice!"
"Listen," said the fox, "each one owns something good: You have such beauty; the nightingale has his song; and the owl has his eyes. Even if you had a sweet voice, you would still complain about another thing. Why can't you just be happy about what you have already got?"
【寫作內容】
1.以約30個詞概括短文的主要內容。
2.以約120個詞就“停止抱怨并珍惜自己所擁有的“這一主題發(fā)表你的看法，內容包括：
（l）你或你身邊的人的類似事例；
(2）談談你對該主題的看法。
【寫作要求】
1.作文中可以使用自己的親身經歷或虛構的故事，也可以參照閱讀材料的內容，但不得
直接引用原文中的句子：
2.文中不能出現(xiàn)真實姓名和學校名稱。
【評分標準】
概括準確，語言規(guī)范，內容合適，語篇連貫。

Answer 1

This story is about a peacock who complained about his ugly voice while actually he is very beautiful. A fox advised him to be content with what he was blessed with.
The peacock reminds of my friend Mike, who is always upset. He complained his parents are too busy to stay at home with him, He complains he is too short to play basketball well. But he never realizes that his parents love him so much, and how beautifully he can play the violin, which makes him the envy of his classmates.
Many people around us focus on what they want instead of what they have. As a result of their endless desires, they are often dissatisfied. In my opinion, we should stay positive and value what we have instead of complaining too much.  If we remain grateful for what we already have and what we can fulfill, we may live a happier life.

試題分析：本文屬于讀寫任務寫作，動筆前，一定要認真閱讀原文，并理解內容。認真看清題目要求，這篇書面表達給了一段材料：先要求以約30個詞概括上文的主要內容，要求有很高的概括提煉的能力，要抓住文章的主題，再以約120個詞寫一篇短文，按照要點去表達，不能有遺漏，寫作時注意準確運用時態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯關系。寫作時盡量使用自己會的單詞、詞組和句型，同時也要注意使用一些高級語法和句型，使自己的文章更有文采。
【亮點說明】范文的一大特點是詞匯高級，句式富有變化：remind sb of sth提醒某人…，focus on 專注于..，As a result of由于， In my opinion在我看來, This story is about a peacock who complained about his ugly voice while actually he is very beautiful. 這句話用了定語從句和while表示轉折，A fox advised him to be content with what he was blessed with.這句話用了賓語從句， The peacock reminds of my friend Mike, who is always upset.這句話用了非限制性定語從句， He complained his parents are too busy to stay at home with him, 這句話用了too…to句型， how beautifully he can play the violin, which makes him the envy of his classmates.這句話也是非限制性定語從句， Many people around us focus on what they want instead of what they have. we should stay positive and value what we have instead of complaining too much.  If we remain grateful for what we already have and what we can fulfill, we may live a happier life. 這三句話都用了what連接的賓語從句。