Question

一個(gè)人的成長(zhǎng)是一個(gè)比較復(fù)雜的過程，其個(gè)性的形成和發(fā)展受諸多因素的影響，比如：家庭、學(xué)校、社會(huì)、朋友、書籍、偉人、名人等�，F(xiàn)在校英語報(bào)向你約稿，了解至今哪些因素對(duì)你的成長(zhǎng)影響最大。請(qǐng)以Tracking My Growth為題，按以下要求寫篇短文。
1. 選擇并陳述對(duì)你的成長(zhǎng)起著很大影響的家庭、學(xué)校、社會(huì)、朋友、書籍、偉人、名人等諸多因素中的兩個(gè)或三個(gè)；
2. 談?wù)勀愕目捶ê屠碛伞?br /> 3. 字?jǐn)?shù)100-120。
Tracking My Growth
The process of growing up is complex for every person, __________________________________________
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Answer 1

One possible version:
Tracking My Growth
The process of growing up is complex for every person, for there are many influential factors in a person’s
growth as well as the development of his personality. As for me, what has affected me most in my both growth and personality are my family and friends, the two equally important factors.
After one is born, family is the very place in which he will grow up. A family plays a significant role in shaping children’s character because it’s children’s most valuable source of knowledge and experiences. Those who are brought up in good families tend to possess many pleasant characters and vice versa.
On the other hand, friends in some ways influence him more rapidly than families do. Friends have many different opinions and personalities. Discussing with them builds up his personality. Frankly speaking, I get lots of valuable things from my friends.
Family offers me warmth and care. Friends give me strength and horizons. Therefore, both of them are most influential in my growth,.

試題解析：從文章體裁分析，本文是一篇記敘文的寫作，陳述了對(duì)你的成長(zhǎng)起著很大影響的家庭、學(xué)校、社會(huì)、朋友、書籍、偉人、名人等諸多因素兩個(gè)或三個(gè)；且談?wù)勀愕目捶ê屠碛伞?br />【亮點(diǎn)說明】
文章使用了非常好的短語和句子給文章增色，如what has affected me most in my both growth and personality are my family and friends, the two equally important factors.最影響我成長(zhǎng)我個(gè)性的我的家人，朋友，兩個(gè)同樣重要的因素（what引導(dǎo)的名詞性從句做主語），After one is born, family is the very place in which he will grow up.在一個(gè)人出生之后，家庭就是他將長(zhǎng)大的地方（介詞+ which 引導(dǎo)的非限制性定語從句），A family plays a significant role in shaping children’s character一個(gè)家庭在塑造孩子們的人格方面起著重要的作用（play a role in 在 中起作用），并且主語了句子的銜接如：As for me至于我, On the other hand,在另一方面，F(xiàn)rankly speaking,坦誠(chéng)的講Therefore因此等，還有高級(jí)詞匯possess many pleasant character 令人愉悅的品格significant重要的等。