Question

假如你是高二學(xué)生小王，在復(fù)習(xí)準(zhǔn)備迎接期末考中遇到煩惱時(shí)，你的同學(xué)給過你很多鼓勵(lì)和幫助，你深有感觸。
現(xiàn)在請(qǐng)你根據(jù)以下要點(diǎn)，用英語(yǔ)寫一篇100—120個(gè)詞的短文。要求如下：
1.你的煩惱
2.同學(xué)如何鼓勵(lì)和幫助到你
3. 你的感觸
With the final-exam drawing near, ___________________________________

Answer 1

With the final-exam drawing near, I was feeling more and more stressed for fear that I would fail in the exam. I believed no matter how hard I worked, I wouldn’t pass the exam, which may disappoint my parents and teachers. Therefore, I was in low spirits .It was my classmate Tom who often chatted with me after class to make me relaxed and encouraged me to overcome myself. Later on, I felt more relaxed without so much pressure.
What he said made me realize that whether to get higher exam marks is not my real goal. The most important thing is that one should always dream to be better. As long as I try my best and keep up the spirit of not giving up, everything is going well.

試題分析：這是一篇提綱類書面表達(dá)，文章的要點(diǎn)也基本上都給出來(lái)了，而且很具體，考生要把要點(diǎn)解釋清楚，不能有遺漏。除了表達(dá)這些要點(diǎn)以外，還要闡述自己的觀點(diǎn)，這就要求考生自己拓展發(fā)揮，在寫作的過程中，要注意使用高級(jí)詞匯和高級(jí)句型，如強(qiáng)調(diào)句，倒裝句等，讓文章更上檔次。同時(shí)在列舉措施的時(shí)候要使用合適的連接詞如：First，second， Besides, What’s more等，讓文章看起來(lái)很有條理，也很流暢。本篇文章在寫作時(shí)不要啰嗦，力求簡(jiǎn)潔。
【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】所給范文語(yǔ)言簡(jiǎn)潔，運(yùn)用了一些詞組： for fear that 唯恐，in low spirits 情緒低落，范文中的句式多變，運(yùn)用不同的語(yǔ)法知識(shí)：I believed no matter how hard I worked, I wouldn’t pass the exam, which may disappoint my parents and teachers. 這句話用了讓步狀語(yǔ)從句和非限制性定語(yǔ)從句， It was my classmate Tom who often chatted with me after class to make me relaxed and encouraged me to overcome myself.這句話用了強(qiáng)調(diào)句。What he said made me realize that whether to get higher exam marks is not my real goal.這句話用了主語(yǔ)從句和賓語(yǔ)從句。 The most important thing is that one should always dream to be better.這句話用了表語(yǔ)從句， As long as I try my best and keep up the spirit of not giving up, everything is going well.這句話用了條件狀語(yǔ)從句。