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My parents and I made a tour to Xian during the holiday. Instead of having a travel agency arrange our accommodation, we booked the train tickets and hotel room on the Internet by ourselves. During our tour in Xian, we went to many places of interest, took lots of pictures, and learned about the history of Xian. No tourist will miss the local food in Xian, nor will we. We enjoyed typical local foods, which tasted nice. After I returned, I couldn’t wait to share the photos and experiences with my classmates. The trip to Xian has become a happy memory to me.:
試題分析:這是一篇看圖寫作,一共四幅圖。做題時:1. 認真讀圖,可知四幅圖講述的是你和父母去西安自助旅游的 經(jīng)過,2. 初步構思,考慮用詞、短語、句型和時態(tài)。3. 連詞成句,然后再連句成文。盡可能地充分利用所學的短語或句型來表述具體的內容。4. 反復審核,修改錯誤。5. 注意所給的漢語提示。一般說來,看圖寫話中的漢語提示往往給定了有關的時間、地點、人物等相關的信息,還有參考詞匯都是有用信息。在把握了文章的中心后,應在內心構思一個基本的框架,并考慮使用恰當?shù)脑~語、短語和句型,以充分地表達文章的內容。這是體現(xiàn)自身能力的重要一環(huán)。然后再將各圖的單個句子串連起來。串連時,要注意使用適當?shù)倪B接詞語或過渡性語句,不至于讓讀者覺得文章中出現(xiàn)跳躍現(xiàn)象,更使上下文更為緊湊、自然。
【亮點說明】所給范文條理清晰,語言簡潔,應用了一些較好短語的句子:made a tour to 到…旅行,Instead of 代替,by ourselves自己,places of interest名勝, took lots of pictures拍了很多照片,ouldn’t wait to 迫不及待的做…No tourist will miss the local food in Xian, nor will we. 這句話用了倒裝句,We enjoyed typical local foods, which tasted nice. 這句話用了非限制性定語從句。