Question

請(qǐng)根據(jù)下面的漫畫(huà)，結(jié)合你自己的切身體會(huì)，以"How to face the college entrance examinations"為題，用英語(yǔ)寫(xiě)一篇短評(píng)。

要求：1) 著重描述漫畫(huà)所表達(dá)的現(xiàn)象以及你的看法，可適當(dāng)發(fā)揮想象，不要做簡(jiǎn)單描述；
2) 詞數(shù)150左右；
3) 參考詞匯：補(bǔ)腦汁 tonics

Answer 1

One possible version:
　　In the cartoon, a senior 3 student is reading in bed and taking some tonics, with many books beside his bed.
　　Seeing it, I can't help wondering whether Senior 3 students should take a lot of tonics to keep fit. I don't think it unnecessary to. Taking tonics will cause us to put on weight, which is bad for our health. What's more, the price of tonics is rather high.
　　Then how can we face the college entrance examinations? In my point, we can make progress if we follow the advice. First of all, we should work hard, do more practice and use our mind whenever we meet with problems. Secondly, try to build up our confidence, never give up or lose heart whatever happens. We also should keep a good state of mind. Thirdly, we must create our own way of learning and seek help from both teachers and classmates. Finally, we should have enough nutrients and do more physical exercise so as to keep fit. Don't stay up!.
　　Make efforts, and we will succeed. (176詞)

試題分析：這是看圖作文，認(rèn)真讀圖，可知圖畫(huà)反映了學(xué)生高考心態(tài)的問(wèn)題，要求著重描述漫畫(huà)所表達(dá)的現(xiàn)象以及你的看法，首先要認(rèn)真看圖，描述漫畫(huà)內(nèi)容，語(yǔ)言要簡(jiǎn)潔，要抓住重點(diǎn)，闡述自己的觀點(diǎn)要有理有據(jù)，條理清楚，注意緊扣文章主題，不能偏離主題。寫(xiě)作時(shí)注意準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時(shí)態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯關(guān)系，不能出現(xiàn)文章脫節(jié)問(wèn)題。盡量使用自己熟悉的單詞句式，同時(shí)也要注意使用高級(jí)詞匯和高級(jí)句型使文章顯得更有檔次。
【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】.范文出彩的地方很多：熟練運(yùn)用了高中階段的重點(diǎn)短語(yǔ)和句型：What's more, 更有甚者，In my point, build up our confidence　　In the cartoon, a senior 3 student is reading in bed and taking some tonics, with many books beside his bed. 這句話使用了with復(fù)合結(jié)構(gòu)， Seeing it, I can't help wondering whether Senior 3 students should take a lot of tonics to keep fit. 這句話用了現(xiàn)在分詞做狀語(yǔ)和賓語(yǔ)從句，I don't think it unnecessary to. 這句話用了it做形式賓語(yǔ)和省略句，Taking tonics will cause us to put on weight, which is bad for our health. 這句話用了動(dòng)名詞做主語(yǔ)和非限制性定語(yǔ)從句， we should work hard, do more practice and use our mind whenever we meet with problems. 這句話用了讓步狀語(yǔ)從句， we should have enough nutrients and do more physical exercise so as to keep fit.這句話用了目的狀語(yǔ)，Make efforts, and we will succeed.這句話用了祈使句+and+簡(jiǎn)單句的句型，還有范文還使用了First of all, Secondly, Thirdly, Finally,這樣的關(guān)聯(lián)詞使文章更加連貫。