Question

上周末Anna去商店購物。下面四幅圖描述的是Anna 購物回家時(shí)在路上所發(fā)生的事。
請(qǐng)以“ What an Unlucky Day” 為題寫一篇短文。

Answer 1

What an Unlucky Day
Last weekend Anna went shopping.With full bags of goods in both hands, she headed for a nearby bus stop, tired and hungry. She was waiting for the bus when it began to rain. After what seemed ages, came a bus, crowded with passengers. When it was her turn to get on the bus, someone said, “ Sorry, no more room.” Quite disappointed, Anna had to take a tax. Half way home, however, the taxi broke down. Hardly had she got out of the taxi when a bus passed by. It was empty, but she had missed it! What an unlucky day!

試題分析：這是一篇看圖寫作，一共四幅圖。做題時(shí)：1. 認(rèn)真讀圖，可知四幅圖講述的是Anna 購物回家時(shí)在路上所發(fā)生的事。2. 初步構(gòu)思，考慮用詞、短語、句型和時(shí)態(tài)。3. 連詞成句，然后再連句成文。盡可能地充分利用所學(xué)的短語或句型來表述具體的內(nèi)容。4. 反復(fù)審核，修改錯(cuò)誤。5. 注意所給的漢語提示。一般說來，看圖寫話中的漢語提示往往給定了有關(guān)的時(shí)間、地點(diǎn)、人物等相關(guān)的信息，還有參考詞匯都是有用信息。在把握了文章的中心后，應(yīng)在內(nèi)心構(gòu)思一個(gè)基本的框架，并考慮使用恰當(dāng)?shù)脑~語、短語和句型，以充分地表達(dá)文章的內(nèi)容。這是體現(xiàn)自身能力的重要一環(huán)。然后再將各圖的單個(gè)句子串連起來。串連時(shí)，要注意使用適當(dāng)?shù)倪B接詞語或過渡性語句，更使上下文更為緊湊、自然。
【亮點(diǎn)說明】所給范文條理清晰，語言簡潔，應(yīng)用了一些較好的短語和句子：head for“前往”， break down.“爆發(fā)”，.With full bags of goods in both hands, she headed for a nearby bus stop, tired and hungry.這句話用了with復(fù)合結(jié)構(gòu)， She was waiting for the bus when it began to rain.這句話用了固定句型， After what seemed ages, came a bus, crowded with passengers. 這句話用了賓語從句，When it was her turn to get on the bus, 這句話用了it做形式主語， Quite disappointed, Anna had to take a tax. 這句話用了形容詞做狀語， Hardly had she got out of the taxi when a bus passed by. 這句話用了倒裝句。