Question

孩子的成長和教育是社會(huì)熱議的話題，現(xiàn)今父母包攬一切、孩子過度依賴等現(xiàn)象十分嚴(yán)重。請(qǐng)閱讀下面的漫畫，按要求用英文寫一篇短文。
內(nèi)容要求：
1．描述漫畫內(nèi)容；
2．分析漫畫所揭示的問題；
3．提出你的看法。

注意：
1．短文開頭已給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)；
2．考生可適當(dāng)發(fā)揮，使文章內(nèi)容充實(shí)、連貫；
3．詞數(shù)120-150左右;
4．文中不能出現(xiàn)考生的具體信息。
參考詞匯：紅地毯red carpet     鋪路pave the way 
From the picture, we can see a family of three walking on a long red carpet．
                                                                                
                                                                                
                                                                                
                                                                                
                                                                                
                                                                                
                                                                                
                                                                                
                                                                                
                                                                                
                                                                                
                                                                                

Answer 1

One possible version：
From the picture we can see a family of three walking on a long red carpet .The son , well dressed waves proudly in the middle while the father behind bends forward to hold the jacket and the mother in front rolls out the carpet ,sweating .
It shows a common phenomenon nowadays that children are the focus of families , shouldering the hope of their parents .Parents arrange everything for their children and spare no effort to pave the way for their success .As a consequence , children become so reliant on their parents that they have no independent thought or creative ideas .
Such a situation is of great concern .In my opinion , overprotection and too much care are extremely bad for children’s development . Instead of doing everything for them , parents should encourage their children to overcome difficulties and inspire them to develop by themselves .Only in this way can they grow up to be independent and become truly successful .

試題分析：看圖作文主要屬于記敘、描寫或說明方面的文章。寫作前要看懂圖畫，確定寫作要點(diǎn)，然后寫成合乎要求的短文。一般來說圖片作文分為三個(gè)部分。1簡述圖片。針對(duì)每幅圖片寫一至兩個(gè)句子，也就是就事論事進(jìn)行看圖說話。2發(fā)表感想。就每幅圖片或整體主題發(fā)表自己的一些看法。3簡短結(jié)論。最后用一至兩個(gè)簡短句子進(jìn)行小結(jié)，起到畫龍點(diǎn)睛的作用。本圖所展示的是父母過度包攬孩子一切，孩子過渡依賴父母的問題。根據(jù)文章對(duì)內(nèi)容的要求，在謀篇布局時(shí)可以使用三段式。除了注意以上問題外，還要盡量使用高級(jí)詞匯，而且也要注意多種句式的交錯(cuò)使用，以使增加文章的亮點(diǎn)。此外，因?yàn)閮?nèi)容是反映社會(huì)現(xiàn)象，所以在時(shí)態(tài)方面要使用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)。
【亮點(diǎn)說明】本篇范文采用經(jīng)典的三段式，結(jié)構(gòu)清晰，層次分明，要點(diǎn)全面。在結(jié)構(gòu)安排上作者在文章首段作者先描述圖片內(nèi)容；然后在第二段提出這種社會(huì)現(xiàn)象；第三段發(fā)表自己的觀點(diǎn)。在語言表達(dá)上作者使用了大量復(fù)雜的長句，比如The son , well dressed waves proudly in the middle while the father behind bends forward to hold the jacket and the mother in front rolls out the carpet ,sweating .增強(qiáng)了文章的信息含量，顯示了作者對(duì)語言的駕馭能力。作者還用到了倒裝句Only in this way can they grow up to be independent and become truly successful 。此外，短語as a consequence , in my opinion 的使用既避免了長句所帶來的冗長，枯燥，使文章長短句結(jié)合，也有效地起到承上啟下的連接作用，這都成為了文章的亮點(diǎn)。