Question

你平時(shí)在餐廳就餐時(shí)發(fā)現(xiàn)不少同學(xué)在飲食方面存在很不好的習(xí)慣，這直接影響著他們的健康。請(qǐng)根據(jù)以下提示，用英語(yǔ)寫(xiě)一篇短文，刊登在校報(bào)上。
現(xiàn)象：一些同學(xué)沒(méi)有意識(shí)到飲食和健康的關(guān)系，飲食不科學(xué)，常吃一些含熱量和脂肪過(guò)高的食品。 后果：一些同學(xué)開(kāi)始發(fā)胖，沒(méi)精力學(xué)習(xí)。
建議：大家要意識(shí)到健康飲食的重要性，多吃蔬菜和水果，少吃肉，多做運(yùn)動(dòng)。
注意：1.要寫(xiě)成一篇完整的短文，不要直譯。      2．120詞左右。
3. be rich in… 含…豐富的，     calories 熱量

Answer 1

Recently，when eating in the dining hall，I found that some students hadn’t realized the link between diet and good health and they didn’t eat healthy food. They often eat food rich in fat and calories，which makes them too fat. As a result，they often feel too weak to take their lessons energetically. So this affects not only their study but also their health.
Therefore，it is important for us to realize the importance of eating the right kinds of food and eat healthily. We should have more vegetables，more fruits and less meat. Moreover，we should also take enough exercise so that we can keep our body strong

試題分析：本文屬于提綱類(lèi)作文，話題是不少同學(xué)在飲食方面存在很不好的習(xí)慣，從而對(duì)健康造成危害，文字提示里所出了要點(diǎn)，考生可以翻譯，并且做適當(dāng)?shù)陌l(fā)揮，在寫(xiě)作的過(guò)程中，一定要注意使用合適的連接詞來(lái)連接全文如Therefore，Moreover，As a result等；讓文章成為一個(gè)整體。同時(shí)注意使用高級(jí)詞匯和高級(jí)句型提升問(wèn)的文采和層次。They often eat food rich in fat and calories，which makes them too fat.這是個(gè)非限制性定語(yǔ)從句it is important for us to realize the importance of eating the right kinds這是it做形式主語(yǔ)的句型。
點(diǎn)評(píng)：提綱類(lèi)作文最重要的是要把所有的要點(diǎn)都包括在內(nèi)，不能有遺漏或省略。本文所給要點(diǎn)很全，不需要考生做較多的發(fā)揮，在寫(xiě)作時(shí)，注意使用高級(jí)詞匯和高級(jí)句型，讓文章更有文采。