Question

生活中沖突時有發(fā)生。假設(shè)你班同學(xué)蘇華和李江打籃球時發(fā)生爭執(zhí),導(dǎo)致關(guān)系緊張。請你結(jié)合此事,并根據(jù)以下提示,用英語寫一篇短文, 向?qū)W校英文報“Happy Teens”專欄投稿。

簡要描述事情的經(jīng)過	打籃球、碰撞、爭執(zhí),等等
分析發(fā)生沖突的原因	1. 遇事不夠冷靜
	2. ……
談?wù)劚苊鉀_突的做法	(請考生根據(jù)自己的經(jīng)歷或感想,提出至少兩種做法)

注意:
1.對所有要點逐一陳述,適當(dāng)發(fā)揮,不要簡單翻譯。
2.詞數(shù)120 左右。開頭已經(jīng)寫好,不計入總詞數(shù)。
3.作文中不得提及有關(guān)考生個人身份的任何信息,如校名、人名等。
Conflicts with others are common in everyday life.

Answer 1

Conflicts with others are common in everyday life. During the basketball game yesterday afternoon, Su Hua and Li Jiang bumped into each other, trying to catch the ball. Then they started shouting and yelling, and it turned into a horrible quarrel.
To be honest, it was Su’s fault but Li was also to blame—they were not calm enough and both said some really mean things. They cared too much about winning and losing. As a matter of fact, blocking, pushing and bumping are just part of a tough game.
To avoid such conflicts, we should be kind to one another, which is essential to enjoying a harmonious life. It is also a virtue to forgive and forget, especially in such a competitive and stressful society. Instead of blaming each other, we should communicate more and put ourselves in others’place.
Don’t be self-centered and try to be considerate. We must learn to handle conflicts calmly and wisely.

試題分析：本題為提綱類作文,要求學(xué)生介紹事情經(jīng)過、沖突原因以及避免沖突的做法。話題貼近時代，貼近生活，貼近學(xué)生，提示內(nèi)容少，發(fā)揮空間大，考生有話可寫，體現(xiàn)了新課標(biāo)背景下的命題方向。在寫作中,學(xué)生首先應(yīng)該注意時態(tài)的變化。在敘述事情的經(jīng)過以及沖突原因時應(yīng)該使用過去時,在談及避免沖突的做法時應(yīng)該使用一般現(xiàn)在時。學(xué)生還應(yīng)注意段落清晰,行文流暢。根據(jù)要點提示,作文最好分為三段,第一段介紹事情經(jīng)過,第二段分析沖突原因,第三段談?wù)摫苊鉀_突的做法,提出建議。
【亮點說明】范文思路清晰，結(jié)構(gòu)合理，內(nèi)容涵蓋了表格內(nèi)的所有要點，有適當(dāng)發(fā)揮，主題得到了升華。此外，文章句式多樣，有狀語從句（不定式/分詞做狀語）Su Hua and Li Jiang bumped into each other, trying to catch the ball.、主語從句（it做形式主語）It is also a virtue to forgive and forget, especially in such a competitive and stressful society.、祈使句Don’t be self-centered and try to be considerate.等；銜接詞的選用增強了文章的連貫與流暢度，如：“Then” , “As a matter of fact”，“ especially”等。