Question

閱讀下面的短文，然后按照要求寫一篇150詞左右的英語短文。
Mountain climbers around the world dream about going up Qomolangma, the highest mountain in the world. But many people who have climbed the mountain have left waste material that is harming the environment.
A team of Americans is planning the largest clean-up effort ever on Qomolangma. They will make the risky trip up the mountain next month.
The team of eight Americans will be guided by more than twenty Sherpas of Nepal(尼泊爾夏爾巴人). Their goal is to remove all the rubbish they see. They will spend two months cleaning up the mountain by gathering oxygen bottles, fuel containers, batteries, drink cans, human waste and all kinds of disposable products(一次性產(chǎn)品). They are expected to remove at least three tons of rubbish in large bags.
Team leader Robert Hoffman is making his fourth trip up the mountain. He says he hopes to bring Qomolangma to the condition it was in before the first successful climb fifty years ago. He says he hopes the effort will influence other people to clean up the environment closer home.
Disposable products on Qomolangma are a major concern. So the clean-up team will take along newly developed equipment to collect and treat disposable products. Over the years, the disposable products have polluted the mountain. In the warm season when the ice melts, the polluted water flows to Nepali villages below. The problem has gotten worse in recent years because climbing Qomolangma has become more popular.
【寫作內(nèi)容】
1．以約30個詞概括短文內(nèi)容要點；
2．以約120個詞就 “Cleaning the World”這個主題寫一篇短文，并包括如下要點：
（1）你所居住的地方周圍存在怎樣的環(huán)境問題？
（2）你認(rèn)為這個問題是什么造成的？
（3）為幫助解決這一問題，你做了什么？
【寫作要求】
1.可以使用親身經(jīng)歷或虛構(gòu)的故事，也可以參照閱讀材料的內(nèi)容，但不得直接引用原文中的句子；
2.作文中不能出現(xiàn)真實姓名和學(xué)校名稱
【評分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)】
概括準(zhǔn)確，語言規(guī)范，內(nèi)容合適，語篇連貫。

Answer 1

Some Americans will spend two months cleaning up Qomolangma, which has been polluted by all kinds of rubbish, especially the disposable products. They hope their effort will urge other people to protect the environment. (34 words)
I live near a main river of our city which is spotted with rubbish of different colors. Seriously polluted, the river fails to provide us with a spectacular view, but occasionally sends out an unpleasant smell with the wind, especially in hot summer. I think the large population and the factories on both sides of the river are mainly responsible for the serious situation. When taking a walk along the river, people throw rubbish into the river and even drop waste from the tall buildings without any consideration of the environment. Waste water from the factories poses an even greater threat to the river.
To improve the situation, I, with my friends, have formed an organization named “Saving Our Home” which is aimed at raising people’s awareness of environmental protection. Our members are now engaged in circulating knowledge among people on how to make our living conditions better by recycling, cutting down on the use of disposable products and dealing with rubbish in correct ways. We do hope our efforts will make a difference to our environment.

試題分析：第一小題考查學(xué)生的分析概括能力。根據(jù)首段可知，登山者把垃圾丟在珠穆朗瑪峰上，接著講的是一支美國登山隊決定花兩個月的時間清理珠穆朗瑪峰上的垃圾，以此來促使人們保護環(huán)境。
第二小題要求以“Cleaning the World”為主題，寫一篇約120字的作文。作文要點已經(jīng)給出，可以參照材料，但不能照抄材料。作文主要分三部分來寫。即居住地的環(huán)境；現(xiàn)狀的起因是什么；為改善環(huán)境，自己所做的努力。
【亮點說明】范文使用了fails to, provide us with, sends out, are responsible for, poses a threat to, raise awareness of, are engaged in, cutting down on, dealing with, in correct ways, make a difference等短語，使作文比較充實；范文使用Seriously polluted, but occasionally, especially等使描述的情況更加客觀，有說服力；范文使用了定語從句which is spotted with rubbish和which is aimed at...；非謂語動詞When taking a walk；不定式表目的To improve the situation等語法知識，顯示出較強的語法功底。值得一提的是，范文使用do來表示強調(diào)，加強語氣，比較出彩。