Question

假設(shè)你是李華，是高一年級(jí)學(xué)生會(huì)主席，開(kāi)學(xué)以來(lái)發(fā)現(xiàn)同學(xué)早餐時(shí)間、課間都在學(xué)校超市買(mǎi)方便面等垃圾食品作為早飯，并吃完后隨手扔得滿(mǎn)校園都是垃圾袋，你為此很擔(dān)心。請(qǐng)你給校長(zhǎng)寫(xiě)信，希望早餐期間、課間關(guān)閉超市，同時(shí)提出自己的建議。內(nèi)容提示：
寫(xiě)信理由：
1．垃圾食品含脂肪，糖太高，對(duì)身體有害；
2．垃圾食品會(huì)導(dǎo)致癌癥，心臟病；
3．塑料垃圾袋使得校園臟亂差。
你的建議：
早餐時(shí)間、課間關(guān)閉超市  2. 提倡學(xué)生養(yǎng)成良好的飲食習(xí)慣
注意：1．可適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，使短文連貫、通順；
2．短文的開(kāi)頭已為你寫(xiě)好，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)；
Dear President,
I’m Li Hua in Grade one. Recently, I have noticed most of students have bought junk food from supermarket instead of breakfast. I really worry about it.

Answer 1

Dear President,
I’m LiHua in Grade one. Recently, I have noticed most of students have bought junk food from supermarket instead of breakfast. I really worry about it.
As we all know , junk food, such as instant noodles and hamburgers, is high in fat and sugar. So eating too much junk food is bad for us students’ health. Even worse, it not only can make students overweight but also can lead to some diseases, such as heart disease and cancer. Last but not least, the packing bags thrown by students make our school dirty.
In my opinion, supermarket should be closed at breakfast time and between classes. Our school should appeal that students develop a good eating habit to make sure that they have a balanced diet.
I’m looking forward to receiving your reply.
Yours
LiHua

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