Question

Directions: Write an English composition in 120-150 words according to the instructions given below in Chinese.
學(xué)校英語(yǔ)報(bào)正在醞釀改版，擬從現(xiàn)有的三個(gè)欄目（健康、娛樂(lè)、文化）中去除一個(gè)，并從三個(gè)備選欄目（時(shí)尚、職業(yè)規(guī)劃、讀者反饋）中挑選一個(gè)納入該報(bào)。假設(shè)你是該校學(xué)生程飛，給校報(bào)編輯寫(xiě)一封電子郵件，表達(dá)你的觀點(diǎn)。郵件須包括以下內(nèi)容：
1. 你建議去除的欄目及去除的理由；
2. 你建議增加的欄目及增加的理由。

Answer 1

Dear Editor,
I’ve learned that our English Post is being reformed and one of the three columns is to be replaced by a new one. I’m writing this e-mail to share with you my opinions.
Needless to say, the columns will definitely be designed according to students’ interest and have positive effects on their study and life.
Compared to the entertainment , I hold the view that the value of the columns concerning health and culture is more important . The main factor is that it is of great significance to keep healthy while loss of health means kissing goodbye to life. Consequently, more knowledge of how to keep fit can improve the quality of life. In addition, the progress in acquiring cultures contributes to broadening one’s horizons, which in turn is beneficial to one’s study and the establishment of philosophy of life.
Furthermore, the career planning should be taken into account in the school English Post . On the one hand, it covers one’s career development a great deal .On the other hand, it makes a great difference to one’s career success in the future.
What has been mentioned above is my personal ideas. Here I am in the hope that my advice will add a brilliant touch to the improved version of our school English Post.
Yours sincerely,
Cheng Fei

試題分析：這篇書(shū)面表達(dá)屬于提綱類(lèi)范疇，這篇作文要求就校英語(yǔ)報(bào)改版的事情給校報(bào)編輯寫(xiě)一封電子郵件，表達(dá)你的觀點(diǎn)。郵件須包括以下內(nèi)容： 1.你建議去除的欄目及去除的理由；2.你建議增加的欄目及增加的理由，根據(jù)自己的建議選定欄目的設(shè)置并以郵件方式表達(dá)自己的觀點(diǎn)。考生在寫(xiě)作過(guò)程中要確定切題且符合英語(yǔ)寫(xiě)作邏輯的篇章結(jié)構(gòu)。確立郵件文體之后，要弄清要點(diǎn)，圍繞要點(diǎn)展開(kāi)，條理要清晰，理由要充分，關(guān)鍵的是在寫(xiě)作的過(guò)程中，要注意人稱(chēng)，時(shí)態(tài)語(yǔ)態(tài)和常見(jiàn)的語(yǔ)法問(wèn)題，文章盡量簡(jiǎn)潔，在文章中盡可能多地使用高大上的詞匯，遵循短語(yǔ)優(yōu)先原則在配以特殊句型和復(fù)合句的應(yīng)用，讓文章更上檔次。
【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】所給范文語(yǔ)言簡(jiǎn)潔，運(yùn)用了一些詞組，如：share with 和…分享，Needless to say不必說(shuō)， according to 根據(jù)， have positive effects on對(duì)…有積極的影響，in turn反之，take… into account將…考慮在內(nèi)，make a great difference to對(duì)…有很大的影響，in the hope that希望，句式上體現(xiàn)出多變的特點(diǎn)，如：Compared to the entertainment ,I hold the view that the value of the columns concerning health and culture is more important . 這句話用了過(guò)去分詞和同位語(yǔ)從句，The main factor is that it is of great significance to keep healthy while loss of health means kissing goodbye to life. 這句話用了表語(yǔ)從句和while表示對(duì)比的用法， the progress in acquiring cultures contributes to broadening one’s horizons, which in turn is beneficial to one’s study and the establishment of philosophy of life.這句話使用了非限制性定語(yǔ)從句， What has been mentioned above is my personal ideas. 這句話用了主語(yǔ)從句，還有范文還使用了 In addition, Furthermore, On the one hand, On the other hand,這樣的關(guān)聯(lián)詞使文章更加連貫。