Question

假如你是新華中學(xué)一名高三畢業(yè)生。請(qǐng)根據(jù)以下要點(diǎn)給某英文報(bào)寫一篇英語短文，談?wù)勀銓?duì)高三生活的看法。
(1) 對(duì)獲得的幫助表示感謝；
(2) 對(duì)將來生活的規(guī)劃；
(3) 對(duì)學(xué)弟、學(xué)妹的建議。
要求：1．詞數(shù)：不少于80(開頭己給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù))；
2．在答題卡上作答。
High school is regarded as the best time in a person’s life．As a senior 3 student，it won’t take long before I graduate．____________________________________________________________
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Answer 1

One possible version：
High school is regarded as the best time in a person’life. As a senior 3 student, it won’t take long before I graduate. Now, I have much to share with my fellow students.
Firstly, I would like to show my appreciation to those standing by me all the way, teachers, parents and friends included. Without their help and advice, my life would be different.
Secondly, I’ve made up my mind to make every effort to study at college,for I believe hard work is the key to success. Meanwhile,physical exercise and recreational activities are also dispensable. Life without sunshine and laughter is bound to be a failure.
Finally I hope that all the younger fellows always keep your dream in mind, by which you will be highly motivated all the time, without doubt or hesitation. Even if sometimes you slack off, tell yourself that tomorrow holds the miracle. Just one more day may be all it will take to realize your dream.

試題分析：本文屬于要點(diǎn)作文。1. 寫作可以分為四部分。提出寫作目的部分，表示感謝部分、對(duì)將來的規(guī)劃部分和個(gè)人建議部分。2表示感謝的短語有be thankful to sb for sth; should appreciation to sb for sth ；表述決心計(jì)劃的短語有make up one’s mind to do sth ; make every effort to do sth ;3在表述三個(gè)要點(diǎn)時(shí)要用適當(dāng)?shù)倪^渡詞，使文章銜接緊湊。4盡量使用高級(jí)詞匯和多種句式，比如定語從句，狀語從句等，以提高文章檔次。
【亮點(diǎn)說明】作者開門見山提出文章的寫作意圖，即要和同學(xué)們分享高中生活的感想。然后在下文分三個(gè)方面分別講述，中間使用firstly、secondly和finally等表順序的連接詞，使文章層次分明，段落清晰。其中，作者使用了多種句型結(jié)構(gòu)，比如虛擬語氣Without their help and advice, my life would be different.；狀語從句Even if sometimes you slack off, tell yourself that tomorrow holds the miracle.；定語從句Finally I hope that all the younger fellows always keep your dream in mind, by which you will be highly motivated all the time, without doubt or hesitation.這些句型的使用反應(yīng)了作者深厚的語言功底。此外，在文中作者還使用了大量的高級(jí)詞匯，如appreciation，recreational，is bound to，slack off，keep sth in mind 等這也顯示了作者豐富的詞匯知識(shí)，總之這是一篇優(yōu)秀的范文。