Question

某學(xué)校提出“走路去上學(xué)”的倡議，請你就這一話題寫一篇100詞左右的英語發(fā)言稿。內(nèi)容包括：

家長接送的優(yōu)點和缺點	可以節(jié)約學(xué)生的時間；
	確保安全，特別是在天氣惡劣時；
	使城市更擁堵、加劇污染。
走路去上學(xué)的優(yōu)點	走路有利于健康；
	和同學(xué)、朋友結(jié)伴上學(xué)會……；
	……。（自擬至少一條）
你的觀點	贊同“走路去上學(xué)”；
	同時要注意……。

要求：100詞左右，開頭結(jié)尾已給出，不計入總詞數(shù)。
Boys and girls,
Nowadays more and more parents drive their children to school….

Answer 1

Boys and girls,
Nowadays more and more parents drive their children to school. It can save the students’ time. And parents want to make sure the students are safe, especially when the weather is terrible. However, our city is more and more crowded and polluted.
I think going to school on foot is good for us. First of all, walking to school is a wonderful way to exercise and it’s good for our health. Next, it’s fun to walk together with our classmates or friends every day. We can talk about something interesting and know each other better. What’s more, if we walk, our parents won’t have to drive us to school and it will let them have more spare time. (或：There will be fewer cars in the city. More walking and less driving help make our city cleaner. The streets won’t be as crowded as they are now.)
I hope more and more students will go to school on foot. And of course, we must follow the traffic rules at the same time. Thank you for your attention!

試題分析：這是一篇表格作文。本文要求按照該學(xué)校的倡議并結(jié)合表格中的內(nèi)容完成這篇發(fā)言稿，我們要用恰當?shù)恼Z言把所列舉的內(nèi)容準確地表達出來。寫作中要包含父母開車送學(xué)生上學(xué)的優(yōu)缺點、走路去上學(xué)的優(yōu)點、并表達出你自己的觀點等，語言要誠懇、有說服力，表達出自己的希望。根據(jù)材料內(nèi)容可知本文主要是一般現(xiàn)在時態(tài)，人稱主要是第一、三人稱，注意并列連詞的使用及主謂一致問題。寫作中注意上下文的銜接和過度，要符合句子間的邏輯關(guān)系。
【亮點說明】
這篇短文系統(tǒng)、全面地闡明了自己對于家長開車送孩子上學(xué)和步行上學(xué)的利弊，表達出了自己的最終倡議，文中包含了表格中的基本信息，并發(fā)揮了適當?shù)南胂蟆Ｆ渲惺褂昧艘恍┕潭ň涫胶投陶Z，包含形容詞比較級和非謂語動詞的準確使用為文章增色不少.如it’s fun to walk together with our classmates or friends，is more and more crowded and polluted，going to school on foot is good for us，something interesting，文中句與句和段與段的銜接和過度更加自然，如First of all, Next, What’s more,學(xué)習中再注意總結(jié),牢記一些固定句式及短語,寫作時就可以適當引用,使文章的表達更有邏輯性,更富有條理。