Question

今年夏天，Angle來(lái)中國(guó)參加夏令營(yíng)活動(dòng)，認(rèn)識(shí)了Hu Jia。請(qǐng)你幫她整理出一篇以“My friend Hu Jia”為題的短文。
要求：1. 短文應(yīng)包括所給內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)，可適當(dāng)發(fā)揮。   2. 表達(dá)清楚，語(yǔ)法正確，上下文連貫。
3. 詞數(shù)：100詞左右。

Hu Jia	1999年出生在上海，和爺爺奶奶生活在泰興。
Hobbies	①喜歡科學(xué)：�？纯茖W(xué)雜志、電影，周三下午去俱樂(lè)部。 ②網(wǎng)上購(gòu)物：價(jià)廉物美，棉織品穿起來(lái)舒服，但從各種衣服中挑選花時(shí)間太多。
School life	學(xué)習(xí)好，經(jīng)常參加學(xué)校活動(dòng)，例如：慶祝萬(wàn)圣節(jié)活動(dòng)(至少用兩句敘述)，在校過(guò)得非常愉快。
Lifestyle	很少鍛煉，兩餐間吃零食，需要改變保持健康。請(qǐng)給她至少兩點(diǎn)建議。
Dreams	想成為一名科學(xué)家，發(fā)明機(jī)器人幫人類(lèi)做危險(xiǎn)的工作；像王亞平一樣登上月球，讓人類(lèi)更了解太空，使我們的國(guó)家更強(qiáng)大。

Answer 1

My friend Hu Jia
I have a friend whose name is Hu Jia. She was born in Shanghai in 1999. She lives with her grandparents in Taixing. She is so interested in science that she often reads scientific magzines ,watches scientific films and goes to the Science club on Wednesday afternoon.
She studies well and often takes part in the shool activity,such as celebration of All Saints' Day. All Saints' Day is on November 1^st while Halloween is on October 31^st.On  Halloween,she and her classmates wear masks , take pumpkin lanterns and play treat or trick game .They have a good time in the shool.      
She seldom does exercise but likes eating snacks between meals. It is necessary for her to change these to keep fit. She should eat more fruit and vegetabls and take part in sports.
Her dream is to be a scientist who invents robots to help man do dangerous work,who climbs the moon like Wang Yaping,to know more about space and make our country stronger.    

試題分析：這是一篇提綱作文。本文主要寫(xiě)胡佳的一般情況、愛(ài)好、學(xué)校生活和夢(mèng)想，全文主要用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)態(tài)。
【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】文中使用了非常好的短語(yǔ)和句子為文章增色不少，例如be interested in, takes part in,such as, have a good time , in the shool,等短語(yǔ)；定語(yǔ)從句如whose name is Hu Jia., a scientist who invents robots to help man do dangerous work,who climbs the moon like Wang Yaping；狀語(yǔ)從句如She is so interested in science that...; 不定式做主語(yǔ)如It is necessary for her to...。文章層次清晰，內(nèi)容飽滿(mǎn)，表達(dá)流暢。