Question

書(shū)面表達(dá)（滿分25分）
假定你校正在開(kāi)展“根除陋習(xí)、創(chuàng)建文明校園”活動(dòng)。請(qǐng)你以此為主題用英語(yǔ)寫(xiě)一篇發(fā)言稿，向全校學(xué)生倡議：
根除：亂扔垃圾、浪費(fèi)食物、吸煙……
提倡：講禮貌、互助……
注意：
詞數(shù)100左右；
可以適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫；
開(kāi)頭和結(jié)尾已為你寫(xiě)好，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)。
Dear friends,
As is known to all, our school has launched a campaign against had habits in order to build a civilized campus.____________________________________________________________________
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That’s all. Thank you.
Li Hua

Answer 1

Dear friends,
As is known to all, our school has launched a campaign against bad habits in order to establish a civilized campus. But it has come to my notice that lots of bad behavior still exists in our school. This does great harm to the image of our school.
Therefore, I strongly urge that we students stop throwing rubbish everywhere and spitting in public. Besides, every one must discipline himself not to make dirty remarks or waste food. Such bad manners as smoking and fighting should also be removed from our campus. At the same time, we should start with ourselves to perform good manners all the time and everywhere. We also promote the spirit of helping each other and healthy competition. Once again I’m here earnestly calling on everyone to take action and contribute to making our school a nicer place.
That’s all. Thank you.

試題分析：這是一篇發(fā)言稿，所以在語(yǔ)言的使用上要大眾化，話題是關(guān)于“根除陋習(xí)、創(chuàng)建文明校園”活動(dòng)，另外注意題目的要求1.要求…2. 提倡…，所以要按照這樣一個(gè)順序去寫(xiě)，注意不要有遺漏。本作文中給出的要點(diǎn)比較簡(jiǎn)略,故需要充實(shí)文章內(nèi)容，需要注意不要偏離文章中心。寫(xiě)作時(shí)注意準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時(shí)態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯關(guān)系，盡量使用自己熟悉的單詞句式。范文中的But it has come to my notice that lots of bad behavior still exists in our school.用的是it做形式主語(yǔ)。此外還要用適當(dāng)?shù)年P(guān)聯(lián)詞把句子串聯(lián)起來(lái)，使文章更加連貫。
點(diǎn)評(píng)：本文屬于發(fā)言稿，動(dòng)筆前，一定要認(rèn)真分析要點(diǎn)，理解要點(diǎn)要表達(dá)的含義，不能遺漏要點(diǎn)，跑題偏題。平時(shí)除了加強(qiáng)詞匯積累，寫(xiě)作聯(lián)系以外，還可以適當(dāng)記憶一些類似的范文，這樣在考試中可以起到事半功倍的效果。并且注意字?jǐn)?shù)限制