Question

假設你叫李華。你所在的城市要為明年暑假招聘英語導游，你打算應聘。請根據(jù)下列提示，用英語準備一份面試稿。
1.愛好英語，口語熟練，經(jīng)常與外國網(wǎng)友（net-pel)進行語音聊天；
2.性格開朗，思維敏捷，善于與人溝通；
3.本地人，熟悉所在城市歷史與文化。
注意：
1.字數(shù)：100-120；
2.可適當增加細節(jié)，以便行文連貫；
3.開頭已給出，不計入總詞數(shù)。
Hello!
My name is Li Hua. It's a great honor to be here to have this interview for an English guide in the summer vacation.
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Thank you.

Answer 1

Hello!
My name is Li Hua. It’s a great honor to be here to have this interview for an English guide in the summer vacation.
To begin with, as a senior high student, I’m crazy about English and can speak it fluently. I’m used to practicing speaking English in everyday life. For example, I often voice chat with some English net-pels in my spare time, which really contributes to my fluency in oral English. Besides, I’m open-minded, quick in thought and very fond of social practice, which I think is a quality that a good guide should have. Above all, as a native of the city, I know a lot about its history and culture. So I’m sure that the foreigners will appreciate my work and enjoy their stay in our city.
If I am given the chance to be a guide, I’ll spare no effort to do it well. In a word, I’m looking forward to it.
Thank you.

試題分析：本文是一篇給材料作文，或者說半開放作文，寫一份面試稿，實際上就是寫一封信。你打算應聘你所在的城市要為明年暑假招聘英語導游，要點已經(jīng)給出1.愛好英語，口語熟練，經(jīng)常與外國網(wǎng)友（net-pel)進行語音聊天；2.性格開朗，思維敏捷，善于與人溝通；3.本地人，熟悉所在城市歷史與文化和具體要求。在行文中，我們可適當增加細節(jié)，以使行文連貫。范文中就使用了合理的連詞和較高級的語法結(jié)構，使文章結(jié)構嚴謹，增色不少。
【寫作亮點】：For example, I often voice chat with some English net-pels in my spare time, which really contributes to my fluency in oral English. Besides, I’m open-minded, quick in thought and very fond of social practice, which I think is a quality that a good guide should have. 這兩句， Besides表并列，前后兩個句子都使用了定語從句。定語從句的使用不僅嚴謹?shù)谋磉_完整意思，又使文章渾然一體。同時文章中使用了適當?shù)倪B詞，比如：To begin with，Besides，Above all,等，使用文章結(jié)構嚴謹，渾然一體。
點評：書面表達中的寫信類作文，我們首先要完整的正確的表達出所有的寫作要點。在寫作中，如果語言基礎好的話，多用較高級語法結(jié)構，這樣可以使文章增色不少。同時要合理的使用適當?shù)倪B詞，這樣文章才能結(jié)構嚴謹，渾然一體。