Question

今天，你收到了好友小玲的一封信，信中她說過年想買一部手機(jī)，為此她征求你的意見，根據(jù)以下提示，請(qǐng)你寫一封信建議她不要買手機(jī)的回信。
提示：
1．發(fā)短信會(huì)占據(jù)太多的學(xué)習(xí)時(shí)間。                 2．校內(nèi)不許用手機(jī)，因?yàn)闀?huì)打擾別人
3．還經(jīng)常會(huì)收到一些欺騙性的不良短信       4．因手機(jī)費(fèi)用而增加父母的負(fù)擔(dān)。
要求：
1．詞數(shù)120左右。             2．請(qǐng)?jiān)诖痤}卡上作答。
開頭結(jié)尾已給出不計(jì)入總數(shù)。
詞匯：欺騙性的不良短信：false short messages
Dear Xiao Ling,
I’m very glad to receive your letter today.

Answer 1

Dear Xiao Ling,
I’m very glad to receive your letter today. How are you getting along with your study?
In your letter, you asked me whether you should buy a mobile phone or not. In m opinion, it is unnecessary for a student. Why? First, using a mobile phone takes up too much time to send or receive shore messages. Therefore the time that you should spend on studies becomes shorter. Second, it is forbidden to utilize mobile phones at school because sometimes you have to respond the call in class. Otherwise, your behavior can disturb others. Third, you may be disturbed by some false short messages. Furthermore, as a student without independent economy, you have to ask parents for the phone expense. That is, they will burden more to support you than before.
In short, I suggest that you consider my words twice.
Best wishes.
Your friend,
Li lei

試題分析：考查提綱式作文：寫好提綱式作文的關(guān)鍵是認(rèn)真審題和分析所給的提綱，因此考生首先要認(rèn)真閱讀前面的提示，認(rèn)清寫作要求和提綱之間的關(guān)系，然后確定文章的主題、文體、人稱和時(shí)態(tài)。根據(jù)所給提綱，列出要點(diǎn)，并以此為基礎(chǔ)充分發(fā)揮自己的想象力，靈活運(yùn)用英語知識(shí)，采用不同的表達(dá)方式將各要點(diǎn)完整地表述出來，注意主次分明，詳略得當(dāng)。語言力求準(zhǔn)確、簡(jiǎn)潔。根據(jù)情景的發(fā)展，按順序安排好材料。同時(shí)應(yīng)選用合適的連接詞或過渡詞，使文章具有一定的連貫性。考生必須認(rèn)真查驗(yàn)是否有漏寫情況，有無拼寫錯(cuò)誤及標(biāo)點(diǎn)誤用等
【亮點(diǎn)說明】In your letter, you asked me whether you should buy a mobile phone or not.這句話用了whether引導(dǎo)的賓語從句， it is unnecessary for a student. 這是it做形式主語的句型， using a mobile phone takes up too much time to send or receive shore messages.這句話是動(dòng)名詞做主語， the time that you should spend on studies becomes shorter.這句話用了賓語從句， it is forbidden to utilize mobile phones at school because sometimes you have to respond the call in class.這句話也是用了it的形式主語，這篇文章還用了 In m opinion, First, Therefore Second, Otherwise, Third, Furthermore, That is,這些關(guān)聯(lián)詞使文章更加連貫。