Question

書面表達(dá)（滿分25分）
假設(shè)你是高中生李華。最近，學(xué)生吃零食現(xiàn)象、體育活動(dòng)后喝各種飲料來(lái)解渴非常普遍。請(qǐng)你就這一現(xiàn)象寫一封信，向校長(zhǎng)反映這些問題，希望遏制這種情況。字?jǐn)?shù)120字左右。
要求：1. 如實(shí)反映這些情況。
2. 表明由此引發(fā)的問題。
3. 提出你的建議。
注意：信的開頭、落款及信的第一句已給出（不計(jì)詞數(shù)）。
參考詞匯：零食 snacks
Dear Headmaster,
I’m writing to tell you about some problems happening on campus.
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Yours,
Li Hua

Answer 1

Dear Headmaster,
I’m writing to tell you about some problems happening on campus. It is common that students are accustomed to having snacks and a variety of drinks after having sports.
I’m worried that if students are addicted to snacks and drinks, it will do great harm to their health, for they are developing both in body and mind. So they need to take in all kinds of nutritions. However, sancks and drinks can’t meet their needs to grow up normally. On the other hand, it is easy for students to get into a bad habit of spending money in buying such kind of things, which is a waste of money.
In my opinion, students should have regular meals. Meanwhile, we can eat fruits and drink milk to make sure that we can develop healthily.
Thank you for your consideration.
Lihua

試題分析：考查應(yīng)用文中的書信的寫作。要求向向校長(zhǎng)反映學(xué)生吃零食現(xiàn)象、體育活動(dòng)后喝各種飲料來(lái)解渴的情況。希望遏制這種情況。要點(diǎn)都已經(jīng)給出，信件要點(diǎn)包括：情況，問題，和你的建議，要求在提綱的基礎(chǔ)上進(jìn)行拓展，豐富文章內(nèi)容，審題時(shí)注意本文使用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)，描述要盡量選擇簡(jiǎn)潔的語(yǔ)言，運(yùn)用合適的語(yǔ)法規(guī)則和詞匯把各要點(diǎn)都準(zhǔn)確表述出。難點(diǎn)在于選擇詞匯和句型，可以靈活運(yùn)用高級(jí)詞匯和固定短語(yǔ)準(zhǔn)確表述。象范文的it is easy for students to get into a bad habit of spending money in buying such kind of things, which is a waste of money.使用了it句型和非限制性定語(yǔ)從句,還要用適當(dāng)?shù)倪B接詞被句子連接起來(lái)，象however, On the other hand,等詞，這樣文章顯得更連貫。
點(diǎn)評(píng)：書信類短文的關(guān)鍵在于要點(diǎn)要全面包括，不能有遺漏和省略。同時(shí)注意謀篇布局的順序，運(yùn)用合適的連接詞連接全文，同時(shí)選擇高級(jí)的詞匯和語(yǔ)法項(xiàng)目讓文章更有文采。