Question

假設(shè)你是李華，剛剛參加完高考，已被中國(guó)某大學(xué)的英語(yǔ)專業(yè)錄取。現(xiàn)在準(zhǔn)備利用今年暑假時(shí)間參加英國(guó)劍橋大學(xué)的暑期課程（Cambridge Summer Session 2014）。請(qǐng)寫一封電子郵件給負(fù)責(zé)人Mr．Smith，說(shuō)明自己的情況并詢問(wèn)相關(guān)事宜。內(nèi)容主要包括：
1．詢問(wèn)暑期課程的設(shè)置情況（如：課程內(nèi)容、課程數(shù)量、時(shí)間安排等）；
2．詢問(wèn)活動(dòng)期間住宿情況（如：是住宿家庭還是學(xué)校宿舍等）。
注意：1．詞數(shù)100左右；
2．可以適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫。
Dear Mr．Smith,
                                                                                             
                                                                                              
                                                                                             
                                                                                              
                                                                                                 
                                                                                                 
                                                                                               
                                                                                                
                                                                                                
Yours , sincerely,
Li Hua

Answer 1

One possible version：
Dear MR. Smith,
I’m Li Hua, a Chinese student, having finished the National College Examination. I am planing to apply for the Cambridge Summer Session 2014. Now I’m writing to ask several questions concerned.
Firstly, I’m curious to know about the courses. How many courses will you offer in all and what subjects will it cover? Since I major in English, I would very much like to take some courses related to English literature and culture. I also want to know the schedule of these courses to see whether I’ll have time to visit other places in Britain on weekends. So I would appreciate it if you could forward a course plan to me?
Secondly, do you provide boarding during the Summer Session? Are all the students living on campus or will you arrange home-stay?
Thank you in advance! Looking forward to your reply!
Yours sincerely,
Li Hua

根據(jù)提示可知，這是一篇郵件類作文。郵件類作文和寫信的格式類似，電子郵件一般由以下四部分組成：收件人，正文，結(jié)束語(yǔ)，落款。其中收件人要注意使用敬稱，正文的第一段要開(kāi)門見(jiàn)山地表明自己的意圖及簡(jiǎn)單的自我介紹。第二段詳細(xì)描述寫作意圖。最后一段一般用一到兩句話結(jié)束，表示感謝。最后落款的時(shí)候注意格式。題中給出的信息要在文章中有所體現(xiàn)，尤其是對(duì)內(nèi)容的要求1．詢問(wèn)暑期課程的設(shè)置情況（如：課程內(nèi)容、課程數(shù)量、時(shí)間安排等）；2．詢問(wèn)活動(dòng)期間住宿情況（如：是住宿家庭還是學(xué)校宿舍等）。這兩點(diǎn)一定要在文章中分別用幾句話解釋闡明清楚。因?yàn)閮?nèi)容較多且復(fù)雜，更要注意文章結(jié)構(gòu)和層次要清晰明朗，過(guò)渡詞一定要明顯。
【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】
本篇范文結(jié)構(gòu)清晰，層次分明，尤其是過(guò)渡詞非常明顯，如Firstly,  I’m curious to know about the courses； I also want to know；Secondly等。其次文章第一段開(kāi)門見(jiàn)山，I’m Li Hua, a Chinese student, having finished the National College Examination.使用同位主語(yǔ)，簡(jiǎn)單地介紹了自己，第二句話和第三句話表明寫作意圖，簡(jiǎn)單明了。正文部分結(jié)構(gòu)清晰，對(duì)出題者的要求也都包括在內(nèi)。文中用不同的結(jié)構(gòu)表達(dá)相同的意思這一點(diǎn)做的很好，如I’m curious to know about the courses.，I also want to know the schedule of these courses， I would very much like to，So I would appreciate it if you都屬于請(qǐng)求類的語(yǔ)言。不同句式的轉(zhuǎn)換使得文章生動(dòng)且詞匯量豐富。這也是文章的一大兩點(diǎn)。