Question

假如你是邢臺市第一中學(xué)學(xué)生李華，你的美國筆友約翰來信詢問雅安地震情況，并表達(dá)了要去災(zāi)區(qū)當(dāng)志愿者的愿望。請你回信，內(nèi)容主要包括：
傷亡情況： 死約200人，傷逾萬人。
救援人員： 軍隊，當(dāng)?shù)卣�府及民眾�?br />婉言勸止并說明理由。
注意：      1. 詞數(shù)100左右。
可適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫。
相關(guān)詞匯：rescue 救援   the trapped 被困人員
Dear John,
Thank you very much for your concern over the earthquake in Ya’an, Sichuan Province.                                                                          
                                                                           
Anyway, thank you for your offer and I will keep you informed of the situation.
 
Yours
Li Hua

Answer 1

Dear John,
Thank you very much for your concern over the earthquake in Ya’an, Sichuan Province. Now I’m writing to tell you something about it.
As far as I know, about two hundred people were killed and more than ten thousand injured in the earthquake. The army was soon sent to join the local government in the rescue. Together with the local people, they are making every effort to search for the trapped and send the injured to hospitals.
I know you are dying to help out. But personally, I don’t think it’s a good idea for you to come. You know, danger still exists. Besides, you will find it hard to communicate with people there, after all, you speak a different language.
Anyway, thank you for your offer and I will keep you informed of the situation.
Yours
LiHua.

試題分析：考查應(yīng)用文中的書信的寫作。你的美國筆友約翰來信詢問雅安地震情況，并表達(dá)了要去災(zāi)區(qū)當(dāng)志愿者的愿望。請你回信.要點(diǎn)都已經(jīng)給出，審題時注意本文使用一般過去時和一般現(xiàn)在時，描述要盡量選擇簡潔的語言，運(yùn)用合適的語法規(guī)則和詞匯把各要點(diǎn)都準(zhǔn)確表述出。難點(diǎn)在于選擇詞匯和句型，可以靈活運(yùn)用高級詞匯和固定短語準(zhǔn)確表述。象范文的I don’t think it’s a good idea for you to come.和 you will find it hard to communicate with people there,都使用了it，還要用適當(dāng)?shù)倪B接詞被句子連接起來，象As far as I know,after all,besides等詞，這樣文章顯得更連貫。
點(diǎn)評：書信類短文的關(guān)鍵在于要點(diǎn)要全面包括，不能有遺漏和省略。同時注意謀篇布局的順序，運(yùn)用合適的連接詞連接全文，同時選擇高級的詞匯和語法項目讓文章更有文采。