Question

假如你是中學(xué)生李華，你在學(xué)校食堂就餐的過程中，發(fā)現(xiàn)學(xué)生浪費(fèi)飯菜的行為十分嚴(yán)重，你深感痛心和羞愧。請給校長寫一封信。
1.說明寫信的目的;
2.對(duì)這些行為進(jìn)行批評(píng)；
3.提出切實(shí)可行的建議。
注意：1.詞數(shù)100左右；
2.可以適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫；
3.開頭和結(jié)束語已為你寫好。
Dear Mr. Headmaster,
I’m Li Hua, a student from Senior Three.  

Answer 1

One possible version:
Dear Mr Headmaster,
I’m Li Hua, a student from Senior 3. I am writing to draw your attention to some improper behavior among us students---wasting food in the school cafeteria. Some of them throw away a little food while others waste most of them just because the food is not so delicious. As we all know, some people at home and abroad are going hungry seriously. I always feel painful and ashamed whenever I see this. It is obviously inappropriate for students to waste food .
In order to solve the problem, some measures should be taken by our school. First, all the students are made to understand that a great number of people don’t have adequate food , which may help them realize how terrible it is for them to waste food. What’s more, I wonder if our school can set up specific regulations against such behavior. I believe that the bad habit will be got rid of soon with our joint efforts.
I hope my suggestions will be useful.
Yours faithfully,
Li Hua

試題分析：本文是篇材料作文，材料非常簡單，學(xué)生很容易把握寫作要求和寫作目的�？忌�在寫作之前必修認(rèn)真審題，首先要注意文章的時(shí)態(tài)，要求是對(duì)學(xué)生日常生活中存在的浪費(fèi)現(xiàn)象，所以要用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)。要求讓你給校長寫信，因此本文必須用第一人稱。再有就是不能根據(jù)材料逐字逐句的翻譯應(yīng)該注意句子的銜接，以提高作文的檔次。
【亮點(diǎn)說明】文中使用了非常好的短語和句子為文章增色不少，比如draw your attention to，throw away，As we all know, going hungry，whenever， a great number of，還運(yùn)用了It is adj for sb to do sth; which引導(dǎo)的非限制性定語從句等等。并注意了句子的銜接如： In order to，What’s more 等等。