Question

為了了解目前我國(guó)高中階段師生關(guān)系的現(xiàn)狀，BBC UK China 網(wǎng)站互動(dòng)專區(qū)推出“高中師生關(guān)系大家談”英文欄目。假如你叫李華，一名高三的學(xué)生，想給該欄目發(fā)帖。內(nèi)容包括以下要點(diǎn)：
1.你校師生關(guān)系和睦；
2.你與老師的關(guān)系如何（如常向老師請(qǐng)教，互相交流等）；
3.師生關(guān)系如何建立提出自己的看法。
注意：1.   可根據(jù)要求加以必要發(fā)揮，但不要逐字翻譯；
2.   詞數(shù)100左右。

Answer 1

Generally , the teachers and students are in good relationship in which we respect each other in our school. As for me, I’m quite willing to share my thoughts with my teachers. Whenever I have any difficulty, I’d like to turn to my teachers , and they always show love and concern for me and give me strong support and good advice.
In my opinion , teachers and students should enjoy an equal relationship. To build a relationship of this kind, teachers should become friends of students while students ought to place more trust in their teachers. Thus we could exchange ideas freely and both teachers and students would benefit from such a warm relationship.

試題分析：本篇書面表達(dá)是要求給網(wǎng)站發(fā)帖，內(nèi)容要求貼近學(xué)生生活，學(xué)生應(yīng)該很容易把握�？忌�在寫作之前必須認(rèn)真審題，首先要注意文章的時(shí)態(tài)，要求介紹自己學(xué)校師生以及自己與老師的關(guān)系情況，所以要用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)，建議部分可以用一般將來時(shí)；當(dāng)然也必須用第一人稱。寫作時(shí)不要根據(jù)材料逐字翻譯，應(yīng)該注意細(xì)節(jié)的補(bǔ)充以及連接詞的使用和句式的變化，以提高作文的檔次。
【亮點(diǎn)說明】范文脈絡(luò)清楚，要點(diǎn)全面。介詞短語，不定式短語和插入語的使用使得文章結(jié)構(gòu)更為緊湊，比如As for me,；In my opinion；To build a relationship of this kind,等；文中多種句式和復(fù)合句的運(yùn)用也使得范文亮點(diǎn)紛呈，比如：定語從句in which we respect each other in our school；讓步狀語從句Whenever I have any difficulty；并列句while students ought to place more trust in their teachers.總之，是一篇值得借鑒的好文章。