Question

閱讀下面短文，然后按要求寫一篇150詞左右的英語短文。
Once upon a time in a land far away, there was a wonderful old man who loved everything：animals, spiders, insects...
One day while walking through the woods the nice old man found a cocoon（繭）of a butterfly. He took it home. A few days later, a small opening appeared; he sat and watched the butterfly for several hours as it struggled to force its body through that little hole. Then it seemed to stop making any progress. It appeared as if it had gotten as far as it could and it could go no farther.
Then the man decided to help the butterfly, so he took a pair of scissors and cut off the remaining bit of the cocoon.
The butterfly then came out with ease.
But it had a swollen body and small, shriveled（萎縮的）wings. The man continued to watch the butterfly because he expected that, at any moment, the wings would enlarge and expand to be able to support the body. Neither happened! In fact, the butterfly spent the rest of its life crawling around with a swollen body and shriveled wings. It never was able to fly.
What the kind-hearted man did not understand was that the restricting cocoon and the struggle required for the butterfly to get through the tiny opening were Nature's way of forcing fluid（液體）from the body of the butterfly into its wings so that it would be ready for flight once it achieved its freedom from the cocoon.
Sometimes struggles are exactly what we need in our life. If we were allowed to go through our life without any hardships, it would fail us. We would not be as strong as what we could have been. And we could never fly.
【寫作內(nèi)容】
1.以約30個詞概括上文的主要內(nèi)容。
2.以約120個詞就“個人成長需要艱難生活的磨礪”的主題發(fā)表看法，至少包含以下內(nèi)容要點：
（1）你讀了這個故事的感受；
（2）敘述當前父母溺愛子女的現(xiàn)象和由此造成的后果；
（3）假如你是父母的一方，你會如何磨礪自己的孩子？
【寫作要求】
1.你可以使用實例或其他論述方法支持你的觀點，也可以參照閱讀材料的內(nèi)容，但不得直接引用原文中的句子。
2.作文中不能出現(xiàn)真實姓名和學校名稱。
【評分標準】概括準確，語言規(guī)范，內(nèi)容合適，語篇連貫。
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Answer 1

A kind man cut a cocoon open in order to lessen/ ease/ relieve the pain of a butterfly when he saw it struggling out of the coccon, only to find that it could never fly because of his help.
The story sets me thinking a lot. Our life is more or less like this. Sometimes, struggles or obstacles in our life are a must for our growth. It is these struggles or hardships that increase our willpower and contribute to our success. Without these trials, we could never achieve our life goal just as the butterfly did in the story.
Nowadays, with only one child in most families, parents do whatever they can to satisfy the child’s needs and even do for him what should be done on his own. Consequently, the child is unable to look after himself without his parents’ presence. Too much care from parents rids children of their chances to grow strong by conquering obstacles. Just as a saying goes, “Flowers from a greenhouse can never withstand a storm”,
If I were a parent, I would first keep him well informed that life is never easy and that he should be ready to face any challenges. Besides, I would expose him to the hardships in life instead of protecting him from difficulties, providing them with chances to fight for his own bright future by overcoming difficulties

試題分析：讀寫類書面表達是主要考查考生必須熟悉所讀材料的整體結構與主旨大意，利用略讀和檢索閱讀的方式尋求需求的信息，對文中信息進行有效篩選、整合和綜合概括的能力。要求考生在閱讀理解的基礎上，對閱讀信息進行二次理解、加工，歸納要點、整合零散信息，把加工后的信息準確有序的通過短文表達出來。首先，看清答題要求，尤其是“寫作要求”后的具體要求，并在答題中一直自始至終貫徹其要求。應避免句式過于單一呆板，應該有長有短、錯落有致；有抑有揚，使文章有很強的節(jié)奏感，這就要求懂得靈活運用富于變化的各種句式。例如強調(diào)句、倒裝句、with復合結構、非謂語動詞、恰到好處的被動句、高級的定語從句、what引導的主語從句等。
【亮點說明】這篇范文的特點是長句居多，句式富有變化，如：A kind man cut a cocoon open in order to lessen/ ease/ relieve the pain of a butterfly when he saw it struggling out of the coccon, only to find that it could never fly because of his help.這句話用了不定式做結果狀語。It is these struggles or hardships that increase our willpower and contribute to our success. 這句話用了it做形式主語， Nowadays, with only one child in most families, parents do whatever they can to satisfy the child’s needs and even do for him what should be done on his own.這句話用了兩個賓語從句， Too much care from parentss children their chances to grow strong by conquering obstacles. If I were a parent, I would first keep him well informed that life is never easy and that he should be ready to face any challenges. 這句話用了虛擬語氣， I would expose him to the hardships in life instead of protecting him from difficulties, providing them with chances to fight for his own bright future by overcoming difficulties這句話用了現(xiàn)在分詞做狀語。 范文中還使用了諺語：Just as a saying goes, “Flowers from a greenhouse can never withstand a storm”,使文章中的觀點更有說服力。