Question

最近，某中學英文報開設(shè)了“保護瀕危動物”的欄目。請你根據(jù)以下提示為該欄目寫一篇120個詞左右的的英文稿件。
1. 瀕危動物數(shù)量：12,000多種
2．動物瀕危的主要原因：棲息地被破壞，為高額利潤而被獵殺；并舉例說明
3. 被保護的現(xiàn)狀：政府已建立自然保護區(qū)，頒布禁令禁止獵殺及買賣，加大懲處力度
4. 提出更多建議….…
注意：文章開頭已給出，不計入總詞數(shù)。
Saving the Endangered Animals
As is known to everyone, animals are our friends and enjoy the equal right to live happily on earth. However,
more than 12,000 species are in danger of extinction.
There are several reasons for this. _____________________________________________________________ 
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Answer 1

Saving the Endangered Animals
As is known to everyone, animals are our friends and enjoy the equal right to live happily on earth. However, more than 12,000 species are in danger of extinction. 
There are several reasons for this. The habitats of some animals are disappearing because of pollution and climate change. For example, the global warming melts the ice of the North Pole, endangering the polar bear. Besides, many animals are killed for their body parts. For instance, the Tibetan antelopes are killed because their wool can be made into shawls ,which can bring huge profits.
Fortunately, the governments have set up nature reserves and introduced bans on such illegal trade. Police are
getting tough with poachers and dealers. But it’s also common people’s responsibility to protect them. To avoid more damage to the environment we should live in an environment friendly way. Never buy products made from body parts of endangered animals and tell more people about the situations of the animals. Only when everyone is involved will we save them from extinction.

試題分析：本題是一篇話題類材料作文。要求以Saving the Endangered Animals為題，寫一篇關(guān)于動物保護的文章。題目已經(jīng)列出寫作要點，寫作時，所有要點都要包含在內(nèi)�？梢苑秩�部分來寫。第一部分是瀕危動物的數(shù)量和瀕危的原因；第二部分寫動物保護的現(xiàn)狀；第三部分寫自己的建議。注意人稱和時態(tài)的使用，做到行文流暢，條理清晰。
亮點說明：范文使用了一般現(xiàn)在時、現(xiàn)在完成時和現(xiàn)在進行時等來描述瀕危動物的現(xiàn)狀，和提出建議。范文使用了For example, Besides, For instance, Fortunately, But等短語和連接詞，使上下文連貫、通順。運用了reasons for, The habitats of, because of, in danger of, are killed for, set up, bans on, getting tough with, damage to, save them from等短語，使文章充實，有說服力。范文也使用了非謂語動詞endangering the polar bear, 原因狀語從句because their..., 固定句型it’s also common people’s responsibility to protect them, 祈使句Never buy products..., 倒裝Only when等句型，語法知識運用靈活，特別是非謂語動詞和倒裝句型的運用，給文章增色不少。