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假設(shè)你是紅星中學(xué)高三學(xué)生李華，在3月12日植樹(shù)節(jié)（Tree-Planting Day）這一天，你和班里同學(xué)去郊區(qū)植樹(shù)。請(qǐng)根據(jù)以下圖畫內(nèi)容，并以 “Green Action in Our Class”為題，給Teens 的Star Letter欄目寫一篇英文稿件，介紹你們的植樹(shù)活動(dòng)，并談?wù)勛约旱母邢搿?br />
注意：1. 短文須包括所有圖畫內(nèi)容；可適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫;
2. 詞數(shù)100詞左右。
提示詞：郊區(qū)suburbs
                                                                                 
                                                                                 
                                                                                 

Answer 1

Green Action in Our Class
On March 12, the Tree-Planting Day, we had a meaningful experience, one I’ll never forget.
Early in the morning, we bicycled to the suburbs to plant trees, talking and laughing all the way. Upon arrival, we began to work immediately, some digging holes, some carrying and planting young trees，and others watering them. We had a wonderful teamwork! With all work done, we decided to put up a board to remind people to protect these trees. Before leaving, we took some photos to record our green action.
Tired but happy, we all went home with a sense of achievement. I feel it our duty to plant trees every year and I firmly believe if everyone plants a tree each year, our planet will become much more beautiful.

試題分析：本文的寫作首先總起句對(duì)3月12日所做的事情進(jìn)行描寫，這是一次有意義的活動(dòng)we had a meaningful experience，進(jìn)而對(duì)第一幅圖進(jìn)行描寫，我們騎單車去郊區(qū)植樹(shù)we bicycled to the suburbs to plant trees，然后對(duì)第二幅圖的內(nèi)容進(jìn)行描寫，一些人挖坑，一些人植樹(shù)，其余的在澆水some digging holes, some carrying and planting young trees，and others watering them.在所有的事情做完后我們樹(shù)立了一個(gè)牌子，提醒人們保護(hù)這些樹(shù)木put up a board to remind people to protect these trees.最后一幅圖表示我們進(jìn)行了拍照留念we took some photos to record our green action.最后再談一談自己的感想，盡管很累但都有一種成就感a sense of achievement.我堅(jiān)信如果每個(gè)人都一年植一棵樹(shù)，那么我們的地球?qū)��?huì)變得越來(lái)越美麗I firmly believe if everyone plants a tree each year, our planet will become much more beautiful.
點(diǎn)評(píng)：本文的寫作不難，對(duì)于敘事類文體，對(duì)文章的條理性要把握好，在寫作過(guò)程注意使用“起承轉(zhuǎn)合”的詞語(yǔ)或是句型表達(dá)，多使用被動(dòng)，倒裝、虛擬來(lái)提升作文的美度。在平時(shí)寫作時(shí)應(yīng)該多進(jìn)行閱讀，對(duì)閱讀過(guò)程中寫的好的表達(dá)要進(jìn)行積累，并且學(xué)以致用，勤積累，多背誦，這樣才能作文才能穩(wěn)步的提升。