Question

假設你是晨光中學的高中生李華。你校擬選拔一批優(yōu)秀學生，利用暑期到晨曦希望小學為學生輔導英語。你希望參加此活動。請根據以下提示，用英語給校評選組寫一封申請信：
● 對此活動的認識（如對本人、學生及社會的益處等）
●個人優(yōu)勢（如性格、獨立生活能力、語言能力等）
●你的計劃（如怎樣進行輔導等）
注意：
1.詞數不少于100；   2.可適當加入細節(jié)，以使內容充實、行文連貫；
3.信的開頭和結尾已給出，不計入詞數。
參考詞匯： 晨曦希望小學 Chenxi Hope School
Dear Sir or Madam,
I am Li Hua from Class One, Senior Two.                                                                 
                                                                                               
Yours sincerely,
Li Hua

Answer 1

Dear Sir or Madam,
I am Li Hua from Class One, Senior Two. As far as I am concerned, I believe to teach English for pupils from Chenxi Hope School will be good for both the primary-school students and high-school student tutors, which thus will result in substantial social benefits.
I think I am qualified for being the pupils’ English coach, because I have good character, and I’m independent in life and proficient in English. That’s why I apply for the position. I hope I can join the instructive activity.
My plan for coaching the pupils is to teach them by listening, speaking, reading and writing. What’s more important is to stimulate their interests in learning English as a foreign language, creating a good learning environment. I hope you can offer the opportunity.
Yours sincerely,
Li Hua

試題分析：本文是書信類作文，要求用英語給學校寫一封申請信，申請用暑期到晨曦希望小學為學生輔導英語。文章的要點也基本上都給出來了，但不是很具體，考生要把要點全交代，不能有遺漏。而且要拓展內容，在寫作的過程中，要注意使用高級詞匯和高級句型，如強調句，倒裝句等，讓文章更上檔次。同時在列舉措施的時候要使用合適的連接詞如：First，second， Besides, What’s more等，讓文章看起來很有條理，也很流暢。本篇文章在寫作時不要啰嗦，力求簡潔。
【亮點說明】所給范文語言簡潔，應用了一些較好的詞組和句子： As far as I am concerned據我所知,be qualified for 合格的，I believe to teach English for pupils from Chenxi Hope School will be good for both the primary-school students and high-school student tutors, which thus will result in substantial social benefits.這句話用了非限制性定語從句， That’s why I apply for the position.這句話用了表語從句， My plan for coaching the pupils is to teach them by listening, speaking, reading and writing. 這句話用了不定式做表語。What’s more important is to stimulate their interests in learning English as a foreign language, creating a good learning environment. 這句話用了主語從句和現在分詞。