Question

假如你是李華，你的筆友Mike 從媒體上得知前段時間全國多地包括寧波等地出現(xiàn)霧霾，非常擔心，寫E-mail詢問有關情況，請你回復�；貜蛻�包括以下要點：
實況描述       2.影響和成因           3.生活啟示
注意：1.詞數(shù)：100-120詞。 E-mail的開頭與結尾已給出，不計入總詞數(shù)。
2.生詞：霧霾 haze
Dear Mike,
Thank you very much for your concern. 
…
Yours,
Li Hua

Answer 1

Dear Mike, 
Thank you very much for your concern. Recently many places in China including Ningbo were blanketed with thick yellow haze. Everything around disappeared from our sight. Some highways were closed. Traffic jams were commonly seen in the streets. Many people, especially children and seniors, even found it difficult to breathe. As a result, local hospitals were crowded with people who had problems with their noses and lungs. Part of the cause was the dry weather, but the severely damaged environment contributed a lot to this nightmare.
To make a significant change, we really have to do more to protect our environment. To live a better life, we have to push on with the economy, but it would be meaningless if we had to achieve it at the cost of our breathing air.
Yours,
Li Hua

試題分析：本文是書信類作文，請給你的筆友Mike寫E-mail，告知前段時間全國多地包括寧波等地出現(xiàn)霧霾的情況。文章的要點也基本上都給出來了，但是具體的內(nèi)容要考生自己充實，考生要把要點解釋清楚，不能有遺漏，更要有豐富的內(nèi)容，在寫作的過程中，要注意使用高級詞匯和高級句型，如強調(diào)句，倒裝句等，讓文章更上檔次。同時在列舉措施的時候要使用合適的連接詞如：First，second， Besides, What’s more等，讓文章看起來很有條理，也很流暢。本篇文章在寫作時不要啰嗦，力求簡潔。
【亮點說明】所給范文語言簡潔，應用了一些較好的詞組和句子：be blanketed with被覆蓋了，As a result因此, contributed to導致at the cost of以…為代價， Many people, especially children and seniors, even found it difficult to breathe.這句話用了it做形式賓語， local hospitals were crowded with people who had problems with their noses and lungs. 這句話用了定語從句， To make a significant change, we really have to do more to protect our environment. 這句話用了不定式做目的狀語。