Question

你的朋友Susan轉(zhuǎn)學(xué)了但是到了新的環(huán)境遇到了一些交友的困難。作為朋友,你很想給她點(diǎn)建議。于是你寫了一封信,鼓勵(lì)她努力適應(yīng)新的環(huán)境。要點(diǎn)如下:
①要自信…...
②與人微笑......
③一起參加活動(dòng)......
④與人分享你的興趣愛好......
注意:
①詞數(shù)100左右；
 ②可適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)�！　�
 ③已給出信的開頭和結(jié)尾，不計(jì)入詞的總數(shù)。      
Dear Susan,
I ’m sorry to hear that                                                      
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Answer 1

Dear Susan,
  I ’m sorry to hear that you are not getting along well with the students in the new school. So I’d like to give you some tips.（2’）
  First, be as confident as you can. There’s nothing that attracts people more than someone who has a fairly positive attitude towards life. (5’)Next in order ， make eye contact with others, smile at them when they look at you, and laugh when they say something that’s funny. It makes you seem friendly.(5’) Third, invite others to do things together. For example, you can ask them to share a table at lunch. (5’)It’s better to develop and share your interest and hobbies with them. You will make good friends who have something in common with you.(5’)
  Last but not least, don’t be too hard on yourself. Making new friends takes a lot of time and effort. You should be patient. Best wishes and good luck!(2’)
Yours,
Lily

試題分析：這是一篇提綱作文，需要寫的內(nèi)容已經(jīng)給出，但是寫作時(shí)不要僅僅對要點(diǎn)進(jìn)行生硬的翻譯，而是要添加些內(nèi)容，使文章看起來更充實(shí)，要組成一篇通順連貫的短文，一定要談?wù)勛约旱目捶�。需要注意緊扣文章主題，給出的要點(diǎn)都需要包括，缺一不可。寫作時(shí)注意準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時(shí)態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯關(guān)系，不能出現(xiàn)文章脫節(jié)問題。盡量使用自己熟悉的單詞句式，同時(shí)也要注意使用高級詞匯和高級句型使文章顯得更有檔次。同時(shí)注意要求的字?jǐn)?shù)，不要太多也不要太少。
點(diǎn)評：本文屬于提綱作文，動(dòng)筆前，一定要認(rèn)真分析要點(diǎn)，理解要點(diǎn)要表達(dá)的含義，不能遺漏要點(diǎn)，跑題偏題。平時(shí)除了加強(qiáng)詞匯積累，寫作聯(lián)系以外，還可以適當(dāng)記憶一些類似的范文，這樣在考試中可以起到事半功倍的效果。