Question

1）在作文中可以使用自己親身的經(jīng)歷或虛構(gòu)的故事，也可以參照閱讀材料的內(nèi)容但不得直接引用原文中的句子；
2）作文中不能出現(xiàn)真實(shí)姓名和學(xué)校名稱。
【評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)】
概括準(zhǔn)確，語言規(guī)范，內(nèi)容合適，篇章連貫。

Answer 1

This passage tells us that Monty Roberts, who had such strong belief that he didn't give up his dream all the time, eventually succeeded in owning a horse ranch.
For a person, belief always plays an important role in his/her life. As a saying goes, "Where there is a will, there is a way." Anyone who has strong belief can enjoy a colorful life. Otherwise, he will lose himself in his own way of life.
Belief is so important that it can change one's fate. As a deaf man, Beethoven went on working with his strong belief in the last year of his life, though he was not able to hear his own fine music. Marie Curie, a famous scientist, also has set a good example. In 1898, Marie found a new element in the pitchblende. In order to improve her discovery, Marie and her husband worked hard. At last they saw the dim blue light of new element -radium,
which made her dream come true.
From my personal point of view, it can be seen that one with firmly-held belief is likely to get successful and master his own life.

試題分析：本文屬于讀寫任務(wù)寫作，動(dòng)筆前，一定要認(rèn)真閱讀原文，并理解內(nèi)容。認(rèn)真看清題目要求，這篇書面表達(dá)給了一段材料：先要求以約30個(gè)詞概括上文的主要內(nèi)容，要求有很高的概括提煉的能力，要抓住文章的主題，再以約120個(gè)詞寫一篇短文，按照要點(diǎn)去表達(dá)，不能有遺漏，寫作時(shí)注意準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時(shí)態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯關(guān)系。寫作時(shí)盡量使用自己會(huì)的單詞、詞組和句型，同時(shí)也要注意使用一些高級(jí)語法和句型，使自己的文章更有文采。
【亮點(diǎn)說明】This passage tells us that Monty Roberts, who had such strong belief that he didn't give up his dream all the time, eventually succeeded in owning a horse ranch.這句話用了定語從句， For a person, belief always plays an important role in his/her life. As a saying goes, "Where there is a will, there is a way." 這句話用了非限制性定語從句，Anyone who has strong belief can enjoy a colorful life.這句話有定語從句， Belief is so important that it can change one's fate. 這句話用了so…that…句型，As a deaf man, Beethoven went on working with his strong belief in the last year of his life, though he was not able to hear his own fine music. 這句話用了讓步狀語從句， In order to improve her discovery, Marie and her husband worked hard.這句話用了不定式做目的狀語， At last they saw the dim blue light of new element -radium, which made her dream come true.這句話用了非限制性定語從句， it can be seen that one with firmly-held belief is likely toget successful and master his own life. 這句話用了it做形式主語的句型，還有文章還使用了From my personal point of view,  Otherwise,這樣的關(guān)聯(lián)詞，使文章更加連貫。