Question

假如你是李華，你的英國(guó)筆友Bill來(lái)信詢問(wèn)你家鄉(xiāng)是否有霧霾（smog）天氣，情況如何。請(qǐng)按下面提示寫一封電子郵件：
1、感謝他的關(guān)心；
2、簡(jiǎn)要介紹本地霧霾情況及給人們生活帶來(lái)的危害；
3、人們已認(rèn)識(shí)到霧霾天氣的危害，正采取各種舉措減少其發(fā)生。
注意：1、字?jǐn)?shù)150左中；2、開頭結(jié)尾已經(jīng)給出，不計(jì)入文字總數(shù)。
                                                                                   

Answer 1

Dear Bill,
I’ m glad to receive your letter, thank you for your caring for the weather and my health. Now I’d like to tell you something about the smog.
Since the winter last year, the smog has occurred a lot of times. it has done great harm to our daily life. A great number of people have to stay at home for fear of the poisonous air caused by the smog. Smog –related disease get more and more people to hospital. What’s worse , many traffic accidents happened and many flights have to be put off.
Fortunately, people have realized the great harm caused by the smog and the importance of protecting the environment..Effective measures are being taken to reduce the smog weather. People are supposed not to go to work by car.
According to me, I will go to school by bike or on foot, I will tell whoever I meet to protect the environment as possible as they can. Would you like to tell me some good ideas? I’m looking forward to your reply.
Yours Sincerely,
Li Hua

試題分析：考查提綱式作文：以李華的名義給你的英國(guó)筆友Bill寫信介紹霧霾（smog）天氣的情況，考生首先要認(rèn)真閱讀前面的提示，認(rèn)清寫作要求和提綱之間的關(guān)系，這篇文章的提綱很詳細(xì)，根據(jù)所給提綱，以此為基礎(chǔ)充分發(fā)揮自己的想象力，靈活運(yùn)用英語(yǔ)知識(shí)，采用不同的表達(dá)方式將各要點(diǎn)完整地表述出來(lái)，注意主次分明，詳略得當(dāng)。語(yǔ)言力求準(zhǔn)確、簡(jiǎn)潔。根據(jù)情景的發(fā)展，按順序安排好材料。同時(shí)應(yīng)選用合適的連接詞或過(guò)渡詞，使文章具有一定的連貫性�？忌�必須認(rèn)真查驗(yàn)是否有漏寫情況，有無(wú)拼寫錯(cuò)誤及標(biāo)點(diǎn)誤用等
【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】范文用了一些常見的短語(yǔ)：do great harm to“對(duì)…造成傷害”， for fear of “唯恐，害怕”，put off“推遲”，be supposed not to do不應(yīng)該做…，looking forward to“渴望”， 還有一些語(yǔ)法知識(shí)和句型：a great number of people have to stay at home for fear of the poisonous air caused by the smog. 這句話用過(guò)去分詞做定語(yǔ)， Fortunately,People have realized the great harm caused by the smog and the importance of protecting the environment.這句話用動(dòng)名詞做賓語(yǔ)，.Effective measures are being taken to reduce the smog weather. 這句話用了現(xiàn)在進(jìn)行時(shí)的被動(dòng)語(yǔ)態(tài)， I will go to school by bike or on foot, I will tell whoever I meet to protect the environment as possible as they can.這句話用了whoever引導(dǎo)的賓語(yǔ)從句，還有范文用了What’s worse , According to me,這樣的關(guān)聯(lián)詞使文章更加連貫。