Question

假設(shè)你是李華，今天上午第一節(jié)課上外教老師Michael的課遲到了，Michael要求你用英語寫一份解釋說明，內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)如下：

背景	今天早上6:45分左右于公交車站
起因	李華等車上學(xué)時，不遠(yuǎn)處站著的一位老人突然跌倒在地
過程	李華走近，發(fā)現(xiàn)他已暈過去了
	正好有醫(yī)生在場，對其實(shí)施急救
	李華撥打120，并一直在老人身邊陪伴
結(jié)果	10分鐘后救護(hù)車到達(dá)，李華才離開。李華遲到了7分鐘。

   參考詞匯：ambulance 救護(hù)車   first aid 急救  faint 暈厥

已提供的句子不算在五句內(nèi)。

Dear Michael,

I am terribly sorry that I missed the first part of your class this morning. Now I am writing to explain to you what happened.

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I hope you can forgive me.

Yours,

Li Hua

 

Answer 1

【答案】

Dear Michael,

I am terribly sorry that I missed the first part of your class this morning. Now I am writing to explain to you what happened.

At 6:45 this morning, I was waiting for the bus to school at the stop when an old man standing nearby fell onto the ground. I came closer and found he had fainted. Fortunately, a doctor, who happened to be there, started to give first aid to him. Meanwhile I dialed 120. We didn’t leave the man until the ambulance came 10 minutes later, and that’s why I was 7 minutes late for class.

I hope you can forgive me.

Yours,

Li Hua

【解析】

試題分析：這是一篇提綱類作文，你向外教解釋遲到的原因。建議以時間為順序來組織全文。本作文中給出的要點(diǎn)比較具體,故需要準(zhǔn)確表達(dá)，我們需要用正確的英語把給出的要點(diǎn)表達(dá)出來.寫作時注意準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯關(guān)系，盡量使用自己熟悉的單詞句式，同時也要注意使用高級詞匯和高級句型使文章顯得更有檔次。特別注意在選擇句式時要賦予變化，尤其是時間和數(shù)字的表達(dá)法。

考點(diǎn)：考查提綱類短文寫作

點(diǎn)評：本文屬于提綱類作文，動筆前，一定要認(rèn)真分析要點(diǎn)，理解要點(diǎn)要表達(dá)的含義，不能遺漏要點(diǎn)，跑題偏題。平時除了加強(qiáng)詞匯積累，寫作聯(lián)系以外，還可以適當(dāng)記憶一些類似的范文，這樣在考試中可以起到事半功倍的效果。