Question

假定你是李華，正在一所英國學(xué)校學(xué)習(xí)暑假課程，遇到一些困難，希望得到學(xué)校輔導(dǎo)中心(Learning Center)的幫助。根據(jù)學(xué)校規(guī)定，你需書面預(yù)約，請按下列要點寫一封信：
1. 本人簡介；2. 求助內(nèi)容； 3. 約定時間；
4. 你的聯(lián)系方式(Email: lihua@1236.com; Phone:12345678)
注意：1. 詞數(shù)100左右； 2. 可以適當(dāng)增加細節(jié)以使行文連貫；
3. 信的開頭和結(jié)尾已為你寫好
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Yours,
Li Hua

Answer 1

One possible version：
Dear Sir/ Madam,
I’m Li Hua, a Chinese student taking summer courses in your university. I’m writing to ask for help. I came here last month and found my courses interesting. But I have some difficulty with note-taking, and I have no idea of how to use the library. I was told the Learning Center provides help for students and I’m anxious to get help from you. I have no class on Tuesday mornings and Friday afternoons. Please let me know which day is OK with you. You may email or phone me. Here are my email address and phone number: lihua@1236.com; 12345678
Look forward to your reply.
Yours,
Li Hua

試題分析：本篇書面表達是要求寫一封信進行預(yù)約。對書信這種寫作題材同學(xué)們非常熟悉，而且寫作內(nèi)容貼近學(xué)生生活，所以不會感覺無話可說。不過在寫作時要注意對本人簡介、求助內(nèi)容、約定時間和聯(lián)系方式等要點進行陳述時，要發(fā)揮想象力，適當(dāng)增加細節(jié)；而且還要選擇恰當(dāng)?shù)倪B接詞以使文章內(nèi)容連貫，上下銜接自然。在時態(tài)方面，可以使用一般現(xiàn)在時態(tài)。此外本文是向輔導(dǎo)中心尋求幫助，所以要注意語言簡潔明了，語氣委婉客氣。
【亮點說明】文章要點全面，結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊，語言簡潔明了。作者用簡單流暢的語言表述了自己寫信的目的，而且對要點的陳述簡潔明了，條理清晰。文中出現(xiàn)的高級詞匯have difficulty with 和I have no idea of …，以及同位語a Chinese student taking summer courses in your university.并列句But I have some difficulty with note-taking, and I have no idea of how to use the library.和賓語從句Please let me know which day is OK with you.的使用都顯示了作者對語言很強的運用能力，成為了文章的亮點。