Question

你班將舉行以My dreamed career為主題的英語(yǔ)演講比賽，請(qǐng)你根據(jù)提示寫(xiě)一篇演講稿：
1. What’s your desired career?(e.g. lawyer, astronaut, writer… )
2. Why do you choose this career?
3. What preparations will you make to realize your dream?
注意  1詞數(shù)120左右，開(kāi)頭和結(jié)尾已給，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)。
2書(shū)寫(xiě)清楚,卷面整潔。
3行文連貫，符合英語(yǔ)表達(dá)習(xí)慣。
Good afternoon, boys and girls,
I feel honored to deliver a speech here sharing my dreamed future with you. I hope to be…
That’s all. Thank you for your attention.

Answer 1

Good afternoon, boys and girls:
I feel honored to deliver a speech here sharing my dream with you. I hope to be a teacher in the future. The main reason is that I get a lot of positive energy from my English teacher, who promotes lifelong learning attitude. As a teacher I’ll be motivated to keep updating what I have learned through lifelong learning so  as to keep pace with young students ,because they are always energetic and have new ideas. Besides , education plays an increasing important role in the development of society . Therefore, more qualified teachers are in great demand. What’s more, I’m out-going and enjoy communicating with others, which is definitely helpful in the teaching career.
To reach my dream ,I will work hard to enter a good normal university to equip myself with relevant knowledge such as psychology, education theory and teaching skills. I believe I will make a good teacher through efforts.
That’s all. Thank you for you attention

本文是演講稿，已經(jīng)給了提示，切記不可按條回答，十分生硬沒(méi)有條理。題目是我的夢(mèng)想，所以文章應(yīng)該以第一人稱描述，而時(shí)態(tài)也應(yīng)以一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)為主。注意句子之間的銜接，多運(yùn)用連詞，使文章句法流暢，邏輯關(guān)系嚴(yán)謹(jǐn)。
【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】文中用 很多固定短語(yǔ)，如play a role in , in demand , what’s more,such  as , equip with, 并且很好的運(yùn)用時(shí)態(tài)。句子銜接不僅僅運(yùn)用連詞，如therefore, besides, 還用the reason  is that, 這種高級(jí)句型結(jié)構(gòu)。還運(yùn)用非限制性定語(yǔ)從句，不定式做目的狀語(yǔ)，使文章增色不少，還運(yùn)用大量的高級(jí)詞匯，如 updating,out-going, definitely ,effort.,給人眼前一亮的感覺(jué)。注意這些詞匯的正確使用。