Dear Editor,
I’m writing to tell you about the discussion we’ve had on whether mobile phones should be brought to school. There are two different opinions on the question.
Sixty percent of the students think students can bring a mobile phone to school. It is convenient for a student who carries a mobile phone to get in touch with his/her parents and friends. On the other hand, he can also search for some important information on the Internet by the phone. Besides, it’s fashionable to have a mobile phone.
However, 40 percent of the students are against the view. In their opinion, with mobile phones, some students may have a chat on the Internet and spend much time playing games, which has a bad effect on their study and health. What’s more, one mobile phone may cost much money and it’s likely to be lost in the school.
As far as I’m concerned, students should place their study before other things and there is no need for us to use mobile phones. In a word, I don’t think it’s a good idea to bring mobile phones to school,
Best wishes
Yours,
Li Hua
試題分析:這是一篇書信類作文,要點已經(jīng)以表格的形式給出。動筆前,一定要認真分析要點,理解要點要表達的含義,不能遺漏要點,跑題偏題。我們所要做的就是按要點內容給21st Century報編輯寫的一封信。話題是關于“中學生是否能在校園里使用手機”的不同的觀點,注意題目的要求,寫作時注意準確運用時態(tài),上下文意思連貫,符合邏輯關系,一定要把表格中的要點都寫出來,不要有遺漏。在表達自己的觀點的時候,要充分發(fā)揮想象力,寫作時盡量使用自己不會的單詞、詞組和句型,同時也要注意使用一些高級語法和句型,使自己的文章更有文采。
【亮點說明】文章中表達的時候使用了詞組和句型:In their opinion在他們看來, As far as I’m concerned據(jù)我所知, In a word總之, I’m writing to tell you about the discussion we’ve had on whether mobile phones should be brought to school. 這句話用了賓語從句,It is convenient for a student who carries a mobile phone to get in touch with his/her parents and friends. 這句話用了it做形式主語和定語從句,with mobile phones, some students may have a chat on the Internet and spend much time playing games, which has a bad effect on their study and health. 這句話用了非限制性定語從句, it’s likely to be lost in the school.這句話用了固定句型, there is no need for us to use mobile phones. 使用了固定句型,I don’t think it’s a good idea to bring mobile phones to school,這句話用了否定前移。還有范文還使用了:On the other hand, Besides, What’s more,這樣的關聯(lián)詞使文章更加連貫。