Question

假如你是李華，是紅星中學(xué)一名學(xué)生。上周末你參加了學(xué)校組織的去鳥巢觀看第29屆奧運(yùn)會田徑比賽的活動。請你根據(jù)下面圖畫所提供的情景寫一篇日記。詞數(shù)不少于60。水立方：Water Cube

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Sunday          Fine
It’s an exciting day today. My classmates and I went to the Bird Nest to watch a track and field event of the 29th Olympic Games.
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Answer 1

One possible version:
Sunday          Fine
It’s an exciting day today. My classmates and I went to the Bird Nest to watch a track and field event of the 29th Olympic Games.Early in the morning, we gathered at the school gate and set out to the Bird Nest by bus. Half an hour later, we got there. Soon after we took our seats, the field and track competitions began. In the field some athletes were competing in the long-jump while a young woman was jumping over a bar in the high jump. About 10 athletes were running in a 200-metre race and they were rushing towards the finish line. All of them tried their best to compete for the honor of representing their countries in the Olympic Games. Standing in the audience area, we couldn’t help cheering for all the athletes. The competitions were so exciting that we enjoyed every minute of them. After that, we went around the Olympic Park and took some pictures in front of the Water Cube. We also bought some souvenirs to remind us of the unforgettable experience.

試題分析：本文是篇材料作文，內(nèi)容要求講述學(xué)校組織學(xué)生去鳥巢觀看第29屆奧運(yùn)會田徑比賽的活動，講述過去的事情常用一般現(xiàn)在時，把圖片描述的場景變成文字?jǐn)⑹鍪虑榈慕?jīng)過。注意增加細(xì)節(jié)，使銜接合理，還要盡量用高中階段學(xué)習(xí)詞匯和句型。注意長短搭配。
【亮點(diǎn)說明】 把圖片描述的場景變成文字表達(dá)出來，是一個信息輸入再輸出的過程，作者思路清晰，按照時間順序進(jìn)行敘述，使文章層次清楚，同時注意應(yīng)用較高級的短語和句子，比如compete for the honor of ，couldn’t help cheering， remind... of ，還運(yùn)用了非謂語動詞作狀語等等。并注意了句子的銜接如：while，so ... that等等，為文章增色不少。