Question

假如你是李華，一位18歲的男孩，英語(yǔ)成績(jī)非常突出，有兩年英語(yǔ)家教的經(jīng)驗(yàn)，現(xiàn)在是學(xué)�！皭�(ài)心俱樂(lè)部”的成員，認(rèn)為志愿工作能夠使人樹(shù)立信心，培養(yǎng)良好的交際技能�？吹较旅孢@則招聘信息，你愿意利用這次機(jī)會(huì)，為需要幫助的兒童獻(xiàn)出自己的微薄之力，同時(shí)增長(zhǎng)見(jiàn)識(shí)，了解社會(huì)。
請(qǐng)根據(jù)所給中、英文提示完成下面的英文郵件。
注意：1．110詞左右。
2．郵件開(kāi)頭和結(jié)尾已為你寫(xiě)出，不計(jì)入總數(shù)。 
3．可適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，使行文連貫。
提示詞：tutor vt. & n. 家教         Loving Heart Club 愛(ài)心俱樂(lè)部

Dear Student Union,
I have just read the ad on the school bulletin and the moment I saw it I took an interest in becoming one of the volunteer English teachers of the five．Now I’m writing here to apply for this opportunity．
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I’d appreciate it so much if you could possibly consider my application. I’m looking forward to your early reply and please email me at lihua@ 163.com,
Yours sincerely,
Li Hua

Answer 1

Dear Student Union,
I have just read the ad on the school bulletin and the moment I saw it I took an interest in becoming one of the volunteer English teachers of the five．Now I’m writing here to apply for this opportunity．
I am Li Hua, a body of 18, and I have a good command of English. For tow years I have been tutoring two kids in English Presently I work as a member of Loving Heart Club in our school. Voluntary work has helped me build confidence and good communication skills.
In my opinion, being a volunteer teacher at the SOS village is obviously more than just teaching; furthermore, it is helpful to broaden our horizons and improve our understanding of the world. That’s why I’d like very much to take this opportunity and make the most of my special talents and interests. By helping those kids, I feel I can make a big difference to their future and make a small contribution to society．
I’d appreciate it so much if you could possibly consider my application. I’m looking forward to your early reply and please email me at lihua@ 163.com,
Yours sincerely,

試題分析：這是一篇提綱作文，需要寫(xiě)的要點(diǎn)已經(jīng)給出，但是寫(xiě)作時(shí)不要僅僅對(duì)要點(diǎn)進(jìn)行生硬的翻譯，而是要添加些內(nèi)容，使文章看起來(lái)更充實(shí)，要組成一篇通順連貫的短文，一定要談?wù)勛约旱目捶āＰ枰�注意緊扣文章主題，給出的要點(diǎn)都需要包括，缺一不可。寫(xiě)作時(shí)注意準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時(shí)態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯關(guān)系，不能出現(xiàn)文章脫節(jié)問(wèn)題。盡量使用自己熟悉的單詞句式，同時(shí)也要注意使用高級(jí)詞匯和高級(jí)句型使文章顯得更有檔次。同時(shí)注意要求的字?jǐn)?shù)，不要太多也不要太少。
點(diǎn)評(píng)：寫(xiě)好提綱式作文的關(guān)鍵是認(rèn)真審題和分析所給的提綱，因此考生首先要認(rèn)真閱讀前面的提示，認(rèn)清寫(xiě)作要求和提綱之間的關(guān)系，然后確定文章的主題、文體、人稱(chēng)和時(shí)態(tài)。根據(jù)所給提綱，列出要點(diǎn)，并以此為基礎(chǔ)充分發(fā)揮自己的想象力，靈活運(yùn)用英語(yǔ)知識(shí)，采用不同的表達(dá)方式將各要點(diǎn)完整地表述出來(lái)，注意主次分明，詳略得當(dāng)。語(yǔ)言力求準(zhǔn)確、簡(jiǎn)潔。根據(jù)情景的發(fā)展，按順序安排好材料。同時(shí)應(yīng)選用合適的連接詞或過(guò)渡詞，使文章具有一定的連貫性�？忌�必須認(rèn)真查驗(yàn)是否有漏寫(xiě)情況，有無(wú)拼寫(xiě)錯(cuò)誤及標(biāo)點(diǎn)誤用等。