Nowadays, there are many environment problems such as air pollution, water pollution and sandstorms. The polluted air does harm to people’s health. The polluted water causes diseases and death. What’s more. Many animals and plants are dying out as a result of all kinds of environment problems. People should be responsible for the problems because with the development of society., more cars and waste are produced and more natural resources are being used, which has made or environment worse and worse.
As far as I’m concerned, to protect the environment, the government must take more effective measures, it should let people fully realize the importance of environmental protection and those who destroy the environment should be severely punished. Only in this way can we have a good environment.
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點(diǎn)評:提綱類短文的關(guān)鍵在于要點(diǎn)要全面包括,不能有遺漏和省略。同時(shí)注意謀篇布局的順序,詞匯句型的選用,運(yùn)用合適的連接詞連接全文,同時(shí)選擇高級的詞匯和語法項(xiàng)目讓文章更有文采。