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假設(shè)你是紅星中學(xué)高三（1）班的班長李華，你們?nèi)�班同學(xué)在“五一節(jié)”放假期間開展了“體驗一天低碳生活”的活動。請你根據(jù)以下四幅圖的先后順序，寫一篇英文短文，介紹同學(xué)們這一天的體驗活動，向?qū)W�！坝⒄Z園地”投稿。短文的開頭已為你寫好。詞數(shù)不少于60。
提示詞：disposable chopsticks
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A Low-carbon Day
The students in our class took part in an activity of “Experience a Low-carbon Day” during the Labor Day vacation.…

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The students in our class took part in an activity of  "Experience a Low-carbon Day" during the Labor Day vacation．In the morning, we went to parks by bus instead of going by car．At noon, when we dined out in a restaurant, we refused to use the disposable chopsticks served there．Instead, we each took with us a lunch box in which there was a pair of chopsticks and a spoon．In the afternoon, we went shopping at a supermarket．To avoid the damage the free plastic bags caused to the environment, we put what we had bought into cloth bags．It was hot at night．We didn't turn on the air conditioners．We used electrical fans to cool ourselves down．
Although the activity lasted only one day, we have learned a lot from it．We realize that we should take actions for our earth from the small things around us．In this way, we are sure to live in a better world．

試題分析：本文是篇圖畫作文，根據(jù)漢語提示和四幅畫，學(xué)生很容易把握寫作要求和寫作目的。通過認(rèn)真審題，首先要判斷文章的時態(tài)，要求在五一期間，體驗一天低碳生活，并介紹這一天的活動包括四個方面，注意內(nèi)容要點要完整。所以要用一般過去時。人稱必須用第一人稱we。還應(yīng)該注意詞匯和句式的多樣性及語言的準(zhǔn)確性。使用比較高級的句子和句子之間的連貫性，以提高作文的檔次。注意細(xì)節(jié)如拼寫、標(biāo)點符號或書寫等。詞數(shù)少于60，從總分中減去1分。
【亮點說明】文中使用了非常好的短語和句子為文章增色不少，比如instead of，take actions，use...to do，還運用了caused to the environment過去分詞短語作后置定語; which引導(dǎo)的定語從句等等。并注意了句子的銜接如：Although，In this way等等。不失為一片佳作。