Question

渦陽四中正在就中學(xué)生可不可以帶手機(jī)上學(xué)這一話題開展討論。假如你是李華就學(xué)生帶手機(jī)的優(yōu)點(diǎn)，存在的問題和建議給某雜志社投稿發(fā)表自己的觀點(diǎn)。
注意：1．信的開頭和結(jié)尾已為你寫好，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)；
2．詞數(shù)：120左右。
Dear Editor ;
I’m a Senior One student . I’m writing to tell you my opinion                    
                                                                         
                                                                           
                                                                      
       
Yours sincerely
LI Hua

Answer 1

One possible version:
Dear Editor,
I'm a Senior Two student I’m writing to tell you my opinion on whether middle school students can go to school with mobile phones. I think they can do that, because students can stay in touch with their friends and family wherever they are. Besides, the mobile phone is a way to have fun.
However, there are some problems with using mobile phones. The ring of phones can disturb teachers and students in the classroom. Another problem is that some students can spend too much time and money on phone calls and sending messages.
In conclusion, I suggest students not use phones in the classroom* Also, as it is expensive, the owner should take good care of it.
Yours sincerely,
Li Hua

試題分析：考查正反觀點(diǎn)類的議論文。本文討論的話題是“中學(xué)生可不可以帶手機(jī)上學(xué)？”要求闡述優(yōu)點(diǎn)和缺點(diǎn)。帶手機(jī)上學(xué)的優(yōu)點(diǎn)是可以和家人朋友保持聯(lián)系，還可以聽音樂放松自己。缺點(diǎn)是學(xué)生可能會(huì)把很多的時(shí)間都放在了玩手機(jī)上，耽誤自己的學(xué)習(xí)。充分發(fā)揮自己的想象力，靈活運(yùn)用英語知識，采用不同的表達(dá)方式將各要點(diǎn)完整地表述出來，注意主次分明，詳略得當(dāng)。語言力求準(zhǔn)確、簡潔。
考點(diǎn):考查議論文寫作 
點(diǎn)評：本文題型是考生非常熟悉的正反觀點(diǎn)類的議論文，在平時(shí)的練習(xí)中也有相應(yīng)的模板。審題時(shí)注意本文使用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)，人稱以第三人稱為主，發(fā)表個(gè)人意見時(shí)使用第一人稱。本文的要點(diǎn)均已給出，考生需要使用合適的連接詞把孤立的要點(diǎn)聯(lián)系成文。如for one thing, for another; besides, firstly, secondly, last but not least等。也要使用一些高級的詞匯詞組如 be supposed to do sth, benefit 等以提升文章的檔次分。在文章紅可以適當(dāng)使用一至兩句諺語如：Every coin has two sides等可以大大提高文章的文采，提高獲得高分的可能性。