Question

還有半個(gè)多月就是“母親節(jié)”了。媽媽總是忙碌的，忙著忙著，忙花了眼睛；忙著忙著，忙白了頭發(fā)……媽媽的時(shí)間都去哪兒了？請(qǐng)你根據(jù)下面四幅圖寫一篇短文并談?wù)勛约旱母惺堋?br />要求：
文中不得出現(xiàn)你的真實(shí)姓名和學(xué)校名稱；
語(yǔ)言通順，意思連貫，條理清楚，書寫規(guī)范，可適當(dāng)發(fā)揮；
詞數(shù)80左右。

What does Mum spend time on？
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Answer 1

Mum is always busy. She does most of the housework at home, such as cleaning, washing and cooking. Dad and I think she is a good cook and a housewife. My grandparents are in poor health, so she often looks after them at the weekend. They think she is a good daughter. Mum is also very hard-working in her company. Her boss thinks she devotes herself to her work. In her free time, Mum spends some time shopping for the family.
Mum is really busy every day. Now I have grown up and I think I should do something for her. Mother’s Day is coming up. I really want to say Happy Mother’s Day to her.

試題分析：這篇作文要求我們以母親節(jié)為話題談一談自己對(duì)媽媽的感受。在題目中給出了我們作文的主題，并且有一幅圖片，向我們展示了媽媽的時(shí)間都是怎么度過(guò)的。操持家務(wù)，照顧老人，干好自己的工作…等等。我們?cè)谶@些內(nèi)容的基礎(chǔ)上，再加上自己對(duì)媽媽的感情，將這些內(nèi)容用正確的英語(yǔ)表達(dá)出來(lái)。這篇作文自己發(fā)揮的空間很大，但是一定要注意切合主題。聯(lián)系平時(shí)我們積累的有關(guān)母親話題的句型和詞匯，注意語(yǔ)句的連貫，表達(dá)的流暢。通過(guò)審題可知，這篇作文應(yīng)主要使用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)，第三人稱來(lái)描述，因此要?jiǎng)釉~的形式變化。
【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】這是一篇非常優(yōu)秀的作文。在這篇短文中作者根據(jù)題目的要求寫了自己對(duì)媽媽的感受，在第一段中作者描寫了媽媽的時(shí)間都是怎樣度過(guò)的。She does most of the housework at home, such as cleaning, washing and cooking. My grandparents are in poor health, so she often looks after them at the weekend. Mum is also very hard-working in her company.從這三個(gè)方面做了描寫。接下來(lái)的第二段中作者寫了自己對(duì)媽媽的感情，I think I should do something for her. Mother’s Day is coming up. I really want to say Happy Mother’s Day to her.
感情真摯，切合主題。整篇短文表達(dá)流暢，意思連貫，語(yǔ)言準(zhǔn)確。