Question

4月20日，四川省雅安地區(qū)發(fā)生了一場大地震，那里的人們痛失親人和家園。全國人民眾志成城，抗震救災(zāi)。作為一名中學(xué)生，請(qǐng)你談?wù)勀愕淖龇ê透惺堋?br />要求：文章語言流暢，邏輯清晰，用詞準(zhǔn)確，80—100字左右。
詞匯參考： 地震earthquake 悲痛   sorrow    親人 relatives
受到感動(dòng)be deeply moved    重建rebuild
募捐 raise money for
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Answer 1

　
On April 20th, a big earthquake happened in Ya’an, Sichuan. Many people lost their relatives and their homes. All the Chinese people feel quite sorrow.
　　A lot of people volunteered to help them. Some people raised money for them, some people bought something for them, some people went there to comfort the sad children. Thousands of soldiers helped them to save their relatives and rebuilt their homes Even foreign friends also gave them a hand.
I’m deeply moved by these people. So  I’ll use my pocket money to buy some food and school things for the children there. I think all of us should try our best to help them to get out of the trouble together.

試題分析：本文的寫作首先對(duì)地震的情況進(jìn)行相關(guān)的介紹，表明全國人民處于悲痛之中All the Chinese people feel quite sorrow.然后對(duì)人們的做法進(jìn)行說明，如很多人志愿去幫助他們volunteered to help them.，為他們籌錢e raised money for them，重建家園rebuilt their homes，最后說明自己也被深深的打動(dòng)，自己將用零花錢去給那里的小孩買食物use my pocket money to buy some food and school things for the children there.同時(shí)呼吁我們都盡努力去幫助那些人擺脫困境all of us should try our best to help them to get out of the trouble together.
點(diǎn)評(píng)：在對(duì)于諸如此類文章的寫作，學(xué)生要注意變換句式，可以多使用高級(jí)詞匯和多變換句式。學(xué)生在平時(shí)的練習(xí)、學(xué)習(xí)生活中要善于積累常用的表達(dá)。英語的寫作過程中切忌使用重復(fù)的表達(dá)，對(duì)于不會(huì)表達(dá)的意思要學(xué)會(huì)替換，同時(shí)注意用平時(shí)在課本中或是閱讀中積累的單詞句型來自如的表達(dá)自己的意思，這樣文章才能寫出新意，寫出文采。