Question

人類只有一個(gè)地球。根據(jù)提示，以“Saving the Earth”為題，寫(xiě)一篇80詞左右的短文。
提示: 1.如何保護(hù)環(huán)境已成為世界最大難題之一；
2.各種污染破壞環(huán)境，損害健康；
3.不要亂倒垃圾，亂排廢水；4.我們應(yīng)該保護(hù)環(huán)境，使我們的家園更加美麗。
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Answer 1

Saving the Earth
How to protect the environment has become one of the biggest problems in the world. There are many kinds of pollutions around us, such as air pollution, noise pollution, water pollution and light pollution. We can find that rubbish not only pollutes our environment but also harms people’s health. So we should not throw rubbish everywhere. Some factories pour waste water into the rivers and the lakes. The behavior of these factories will pollute the water, and sometimes it can kill the fish living in them.
We have only one earth. We must keep our environment clean and tidy. We must try our best to protect her, and make our home more beautiful.

試題分析：這是一篇給材料作文,動(dòng)筆前首先要認(rèn)真審題,弄清題意。然后根據(jù)主題組織材料，確定寫(xiě)作內(nèi)容。寫(xiě)作中，應(yīng)注意描述的全面性，盡量將提示的內(nèi)容利用上；結(jié)合材料內(nèi)容，可知本文主要是第一人稱，一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)態(tài)進(jìn)行敘述。語(yǔ)言的表述應(yīng)該符合語(yǔ)法的結(jié)構(gòu)，造句應(yīng)該符合英語(yǔ)的表達(dá)習(xí)慣。適當(dāng)使用連詞，做到上下文聯(lián)系緊密，符合邏輯關(guān)系。
【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】這篇短文包含了所有要點(diǎn)，能圍繞內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)適當(dāng)發(fā)揮，內(nèi)容具體、豐富。應(yīng)用了較豐富的語(yǔ)言結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯，用詞準(zhǔn)確、句子通順、行文連貫、表達(dá)清楚，具有較強(qiáng)的語(yǔ)言運(yùn)用能力。層次清晰，語(yǔ)言地道，主題鮮明，內(nèi)容翔實(shí)，格式正確，結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊。使用了一些比較好的字句。比如：one of the biggest problems in the world；such as比如；not only……but also……；We must try our best to……等。學(xué)習(xí)中注意總結(jié),牢記一些固定句式及短語(yǔ),寫(xiě)作時(shí)就可以適當(dāng)引用, 讓文章更出彩。