Question

根據(jù)提示，以“A Trip to Beijing ”為題寫(xiě)一篇詞數(shù)80個(gè)左右的短文。

時(shí)間	2013國(guó)慶	地點(diǎn)	北京	人物	我和父母
經(jīng)歷	游覽了許多名勝；有來(lái)自世界各地的游客；景色如此美麗，我們不停地拍照。 登了長(zhǎng)城，我心里感到很自豪（be proud of）。 我們品嘗了美味的北京烤鴨。 …………………………
感受	玩了幾天我們有點(diǎn)累，但非常興奮；難忘在北京的日子。

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Answer 1

On October 1^st my parents took me to Beijing. We stayed at Huabei Hotel. On the first day, we went to the Great Wall. The Great Wall is very long and old.It’s the longest wall in the world. Lots of people from different countries like climbing the Great Wall. We’re very proud of it.
We also went to the Palace Museum. I bought a lot of souvenirs of the Palace Museum. What nice palaces these are! The following days, we went to the Summer Palace, Tian Tan, North Lake and Xiang Hill. I now know more about the history of China. We took many photos.We ate delicious Beijing Duck.    
Later, I went back with my parents by train. I really enjoyed the trip to Beijing.We’re tired but excited.I’ll never forget the days in Beijing.

試題分析：這是一篇給材料作文。本文所給材料比較詳細(xì)，我們要做的就是用正確的英語(yǔ)把這些內(nèi)容表達(dá)出來(lái)。動(dòng)筆前要認(rèn)真閱讀材料，不可遺漏要點(diǎn)，并適當(dāng)發(fā)揮。根據(jù)材料內(nèi)容可知本文主要是一般過(guò)去時(shí)態(tài)，主語(yǔ)是第一人稱，注意時(shí)態(tài)與時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)的搭配及主謂一致問(wèn)題。寫(xiě)作中適當(dāng)使用連詞，注意上下文聯(lián)系緊密，符合邏輯關(guān)系。
【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】這篇短文使用了大量的固定句式和短語(yǔ)，為文章增色不少。如：It’s the longest wall in the world.like climbing the Great Wall. We’re very proud of it.I went back with my parents by train.the trip to Beijing.We’re tired but excited.等，學(xué)習(xí)中注意總結(jié)，牢記一些固定句式及短語(yǔ)，寫(xiě)作時(shí)就可以適當(dāng)引用,使文章的表達(dá)更有邏輯性，更富有條理。