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請根據(jù)下列提示寫一篇詞數(shù)為80左右的日記（開頭已為你寫好）
假如你是李明，今年國慶節(jié)游覽了世界自然奇觀之—黃山。黃山位于安徽省的南部，每年都能吸引數(shù)以百萬計的游客來游覽。清晨，你乘小車到達黃山，那時天正在下雨。你一下車就開始登山。大約半小時后，云開始散開，雨停了，太陽也出來了。在登山過程中，你領(lǐng)略了黃山的云海、奇松(wondrous pines)、怪石(unique rocks)等秀麗的風(fēng)景。www.21-cn-jy.com
October1, Tuesday
Today I visited the Yellow Mountain, one of the wonders of the natural world.                              
                                                                       

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October1, Tuesday                                              
Rainy & fine
Today I visited the Yellow Mountain, one of the wonders of the natural world. The Yellow Mountain lies in the south of Anhui Province and attracts millions of tourists every year. Early in the morning, when I arrived there by car, it was raining. As soon as I got out of the car, I began to climb the mountain. About half an hour later, the clouds suddenly began to clear and the rain stopped. The sun also rose beyond the rocks. While I was climbing the mountain, I enjoyed the sea of clouds, wondrous pines and unique rocks. I really had a good time

試題分析：這篇作文要求我們以李明的身份來記敘去黃山的一次旅行，簡單介紹一下黃山的風(fēng)景。在題目中給出了我們具體的寫作的提綱，包括黃山的地理位置，黃山的風(fēng)景特色，你的行程等。我們需要用正確的英語將這些內(nèi)容翻譯出來，注意書寫是調(diào)理，按照時間的順序，同時有去黃山的交通工具，當時的天氣情況等這些小的要點，不要遺漏。因為這里是記敘一次旅行，故本篇短文應(yīng)該使用一般過去時態(tài)，所以要注意每句話中的謂語動詞的形式。同時注意表達的流暢。
【亮點說明】這是一篇很優(yōu)秀的范文。在這篇短文中作者將自己去黃山的這次旅行完整、細致的描寫了出來，語言準確，時態(tài)、人稱運用合理，表達也很流暢。作者主要就是按照題目中給出的這些要點，將這次旅行按照時間的順序記錄了下來。同時注意了語句之間的銜接，使文章表達完整、流暢。文章比較好的句子有attracts millions of tourists every year.、As soon as I got out of the car, I began to climb the mountain.、The sun also rose beyond the rocks、I enjoyed the sea of clouds, wondrous pines and unique rocks等。