Question

請(qǐng)以I  Have Changed! 為題寫一篇作文，看看自己現(xiàn)在和過(guò)去有什么變化， 請(qǐng)從外貌、性格、愛好來(lái)說(shuō)明。詞數(shù)：80～100左右。
要求：1、語(yǔ)言流暢、書寫規(guī)范、卷面整潔；
2、內(nèi)容切題、有條理、層次清楚；
3、文中不得使用你的真實(shí)姓名、班級(jí)等，否則以零分記。

Answer 1

My life has changed a lot in the past three years. Especially with the growth of my knowledge, I have greatly changed. I can well remember that I used to be short, but now I am one of the tallest in my class and to my joy, I have be chosen to be on the school team. Besides, what interested most in the past was playing computer games, but now I realize it is a waste of time. Reading is my favorite hobby. Good books are the key to one’s wit and the treasure in one life. Another change is that now I like vegetables and fruit much better than junk food. So you see, I am much healthier than before. All in all, I am happy with these changes because they have brought me the happiness of growth.

試題分析：這是一篇給材料作文，描述自己現(xiàn)在和過(guò)去的變化。本題沒(méi)有給出具體材料, 只給出了幾個(gè)方面，需要自己先確定寫作內(nèi)容,然后在動(dòng)筆寫作.選取材料時(shí),注意選擇自己熟悉的內(nèi)容.在寫作時(shí)要注意時(shí)態(tài)，結(jié)合所給材料可知，描寫自己過(guò)去時(shí)，應(yīng)該主要用一般過(guò)去時(shí)，描寫自己現(xiàn)在時(shí)，應(yīng)該主要用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)。寫作中應(yīng)適當(dāng)使用連詞，做到上下文聯(lián)系緊密，符合邏輯關(guān)系。
【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】如果文章中使用了非常好的短語(yǔ)或句子會(huì)給文章增色，如Especially with the growth of my knowledge；I am happy with these changes。句中使用了what，because 及that引導(dǎo)的從句，還運(yùn)用了but ，Besides，All in all等使上下文銜接的更好。